Duplicity

For the group 'Creative Poetry'.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Discard this garb of angel

That you wear with ostentatious pride;

Epitome of vain vulgarity!

 

With fabulated tales of passion,

You build enduring palaces on pagina,

Putative to last the length of time,

Yet impaired at a sudden gust of wind,

Of the blunt reality you hide behind a façade.

 

Your mind, a perfused corridor of perfume

Enticing all innocence to despair

You lead the like of me with your fescue stick

The emblem of your corrupt existence

Weaving a tale of fictive joys

Unbeaten, unsurpassed

Far too long.

Author's Note

Specified words for the challenge : fabulate, facade, pagina, palace, putative, perfervid, perfume, perfuse, fescue, fictive.

Reviews

[Dayran]

The poem is a little like arriving at the end of a court trial when the judge announces the sentence. One would appreciate hearing about the events that led up to the rising flames. A cultivated reprimand that's all the more injurous on account of the vocab.

[realmwriter]

I must admit that I have to look some of these words up but I still like this piece very much and will, perhaps, even more when I know the meaning of some of the words. Enjoyed it none the less.

[Little Miss]

I enjoyed this poem I loved your use of words!:) I had no idea what putative was until today lol:)
And the poem had a very nice overall smooth flow:)
Goodjob:)

[Dark Beauty]

great write!!

[M.Babu]

Given the economy you had to work with...i think this was pretty dam good...

Minusing the given words the diction was still superb and the flow was very smooth and i appreciate that :D

The power in the subtle delivery was ample enough to leave a memorable piece of poetry in my mind and for that i applaud you.

Good work on this.

~M.Babu~

[J.V. Stanley]

I loved the way this was written along with the accompanying picture, they go hand in hand I think. Fabulous play with words and the flow was consistent, the images phenomenal. Bravo. :)

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delightful use of those words..

[Kenneth The Poet]

Nice work. I don't know if I could write anything this good with those words.

Bravo.

[KAREN]

Graet use of the words. Great flow and the poem is written well.

[Silent Lover]

I enjoyed this poem. It was nice to get my senses tickled while reading early this morning. The second stanza was interesting - There may be a more effective choice of words to convey what you are saying. I often find the replacement of the common word for the obscure synonymous is less effective. Nonetheless, it is a good poem. Your poems make the reader think, that is a good thing.

[Groovy]

lovely poem. well written.