Transparent Existence

For the group 'Creative Poetry'.

The idea of a transparent existence

Haunts me

 

Knowing and fearing

The deception that lurks

Beneath the shadows of the surrounding faces

With opaque lives and darkened minds

Their sinister smiles

Indicating the gloom that lies ahead

Or maybe it is sympathy, misinterpreted

That I will share their fate

Rotten repugnant thoughts

Infecting the mind

Like maggots infect a corpse

 

Transparent

No robes of pretensions and lies

Like clear markings on the wall

About the past

The present

And the future

My mind, once an abode

Of the dreams and imagination

Of every colour imagined and seen

Not yet bruised by a reality check

Which brought with itself

The ghastly nightmares of future

And filled my present with ominous threats

Perhaps my life was too easy to decipher

Living every predictable second

Living a life with strings in some else’s hands

 

Would you not rather be isolated and safe

Than be social and insecure?

Would you not dare to make your own mistakes

Than repeat the old ones?

Would you not dare to close your mind

Fearing a theft of your secrets?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The idea of a transparent existence

Haunts me still

For I know not what is to come

But the way they smirk and glare at me

Maybe they do

Author's Note

And...?

Reviews

[realmwriter]

No One knows what is come. No matter how well we plan our lives, sometimes things just don't go as planned. Yet looking into such a bleak future as a transparent exsistance is indeed a haunting thought. Sometimes we put it all under a cloak and hope no one sees but in the end we all know that it is on display for the world to see no matter how much we try to hide it.
If one does not one to see right through one then one ought to keep ones thoughts and feelings in ones mind, because as yet, that is the only place they are still safe.

[Muse]

I too have the fear of blending in...but I also fear standing apart from the crowd. This poem invokes some serious thought about the false amount of safety one might own by being one of the sheeple. Is it worth losing dignity over? I'd rather stand apart from it all...being the odd one out gives me self dignity I think.

[Dahlia Phoenix]

Truly magnificent work. When we look at ourselves and others, we fear for that transparent imagery, intimidated by the thought that we will probably not know what will happen later. Its a question of who we are and what role play in this reality. I love this poem. Favorited indeed.

[Seshat Nidaba]

Although this piece had its moments of seeming dark, there is something deconstructionist, something liberating about it. The premonition of reality does itself condition us to behave differently, in astrology we refer to this moment in the lifescycle as Uranus square Natal Uranus.

I often like to think of the future as potentially apocalyptic! Nice.

[Silent Lover]

I am inclined to believe that you are a old soul. You speak with a depth that does not bloom out of a mere 19 years of life. Your understanding of human nature, and your willingness to succumb to it's joys and sorrows just to attain better understanding is courageous and mature. This poem is like the divine whisper that society on this earth tries to ignore - it is the call for us all to be more 'real.' To be more honest, open and pure.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

what a magnificent piece!

[Luke Ritta]

wow!...great work

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Wow this is brilliant. Kinda reminds me of my "What Lies Beneath". Excellent write.

[Hotwater]

Double deep! a wee bit creepy this, makes you shiver, a bit big brother-ish who's watching who. Very inventive.
*bird*

[Tree Bark]

incredible and well written!!

[Dream Weaver]

Brilliantly constructed loved the desperation
so vivdly described in your words leaving one
with the notion of what if and what will be..