Come and Stay a while longer

Romance - my favourite genre. :)

Come and stay with me a while

A moment longer than you would

To try and catch 

another fleeting eternity

 

Come and stay with me a while

A moment longer than its needed

So I can drift away

Into miles and miles and miles

Of hazy unrealities

We will create

Someday...

Someday...

 

Come and stay with me a while

Can I hold you back a moment

Long enough

To tell you

Why even walls can make me smile

Why the end of every sullen day

Is a promised night

Of a free one way ticket

To our private paradise

Why I don't want to land back

And face the sight

Of an empty bed

And an empty house

And miles and miles and miles of measured land

Holding us apart

 

Come and stay with me a while

If only for a moment

If only in my mind

Let us live another eternity

Before its time for another good-bye...

Author's Note

Inspiration : "Half Of My Heart" by John Mayer ( http://youtu.be/fnHHUWs4CgU )

Reviews

[Ian Faraway]

The repetitiveness of some of the lines definitely made this poem more powerful. I enjoyed every line, too. The relate able desires and dreams. The wanting of just a single grain of sand to just stop before it passes through the hour glass so you can enjoy the moment with that someone. I know all too well but haven't experienced at the same time. J'adore! -Ian

[the_stoic]

whenever a write touches me , i try and come up with my own version by tweaking bits here and there ... here is the one which is for your write :-


stay back with me for a while
stay back with me to entwine
even if it's just for a moment
even if it's just in my mind...

[the_stoic]

hats off is all i can say .. am so glad that i stopped by and came across this .. the last stanza just swept me off my feet .. sharing it with my friends and shelving it in my library :)

[Suditi]

A beautiful picture.
Half of my heart! My all time favorite!

And the poem is so beautiful.
So lovely. Each line is full of emotions. Emotions of nothing but love.
Plain, simple, pure, love.
Great work there!

[Hotwater]

Yes very romantic with that hint of sadness.
*bird*

[MOON]

Excellent , write great flow , romantic but not sentimental.. another fleeting eternity.. beautiful.

[Distant horizons]

Excellent write. full of hope and fear of them being there/not being there/being there again. wonderful write, enjoyed reading, thanks.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Stunning work, I'm in awe at the vividness this piece has!

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good feel to this poem. Good to find someone you want to spend time with. I like the flow of thoughts and the ending. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Tim]

Wonderful job on this.

[Lily Mae]

I love your poem and the song.. it's one of my favorites. And sigh.. I hate good byes..xo.. :) The picture you chose is so peaceful and calm..as perfect as the moment and love..xo