Shy

Shy

A Poem by Sharon Kim
"

breaking out of your shell

"

Shy

 

I stand before you, armor intact,

waiting for you to see

what’s behind the wall.

The unguarded, vulnerable me

 

Will you be dissuaded?

Will I turn you away?

Can you be persuaded,

take an interest, and stay?

 

On the inside I’m yelling

notice me, choose me!

My eyes lock on yours

and a small smile breaks free

© 2015 Sharon Kim


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Sharon Kim
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I like this kind of poetry. I love the structure. It reads very well. As an introvert, I was able to relate very well to the struggles of wanting to be seen. I don't know, though, at the end, was it hinting at possibly a love connection, a friendship, or just being noticed? It's very well written, but if I had to be a critic, I felt like the fourth line of the first stanza was not necessary. Perhaps replacing it with something more necessary. Thanks for sharing!

Rating: 9.5/10.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sharon Kim

6 Years Ago

Thank you Stephen! I appreciate your kind words and feedback. I'd say it's hinting at a possible l.. read more



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This is such a sweet poem! Breaking out of your shell.. Wanting someone to notice you for what you really are.. Don't we all need that?
I loved the ending to this! Beautiful for sure ☺👍

Posted 4 Years Ago


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Very nice poem....lots of creative thinking :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Sharon Kim

6 Years Ago

Thank you Jessica!
jb

5 Years Ago

Your welcome
The perfect description of anticipation an introvert (like myself!) has experienced. Nice write, Sharon!
And...School's out for the summer. Yay!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Sharon Kim

6 Years Ago

Thanks Sharon! And yes, out for the summer! Hope you are enjoying yours so far!
Sweet piece. You describe well the a frustrating and painful feeling being trapped inside oneself at times. I'm a shy girl too, I know it well :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Sharon Kim

6 Years Ago

Thanks so much for reading and your kind words! :)
this is really good. I love how you give a voice to the inside thoughts "choose me choose me"
I too am shy and completely understand that feeling well!
Great write Sharon. :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sharon Kim

6 Years Ago

Thank you Sereena!
I like this kind of poetry. I love the structure. It reads very well. As an introvert, I was able to relate very well to the struggles of wanting to be seen. I don't know, though, at the end, was it hinting at possibly a love connection, a friendship, or just being noticed? It's very well written, but if I had to be a critic, I felt like the fourth line of the first stanza was not necessary. Perhaps replacing it with something more necessary. Thanks for sharing!

Rating: 9.5/10.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sharon Kim

6 Years Ago

Thank you Stephen! I appreciate your kind words and feedback. I'd say it's hinting at a possible l.. read more

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