OUR LITTLE SECRET

OUR LITTLE SECRET

A Poem by Sunny Skye

It's cool how you

Pretend to be cool

And not care

But when you're

With meI can

Tell you do care,

You do love

All because of your eyes

And when you

Look into mine

You're suprised that i feel

Just the same way.

 

It's our little secret

No one knows

No one cares

But hen we talk

Some notice and

Others just keep on walking

 

We just met

We just kissed

But i know you

Look for me and

So do I

Because we miss each other

Even if we're just

Inches away.

© 2012 Sunny Skye


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A lot of grammatical errors and it disrupted the flow of the first stanza in a big way. I actually had trouble reading what we were trying to say at some points. Other than that I got the meaning and liked it, just comb this poem over and it'll be perfect. J'adore! -Ian

Posted 10 Years Ago


The poem was so sweet indeed, but the lines
"Because we miss each other
Even if we're just Inches away." brought a deep meaning to that .. Great job .. :-)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Fantastic !
That`s great.
such a choice of words,
"because we miss each other
even if we`re just inches away."
Some people can be as one, and
never know.....
---- John

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A nice poem of love. Good when two people find peace and happiness in their company. I like the flow and the desires of this excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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