Sorrow

for school #5

Sorrow is

                        Skating on a

Frozen

Lake

            And

Watching it

                        CR

                                    ACK

            S

            L

            O

            W

            L

            Y

Beneath             Your feet.

 

Reviews

[Dressed in Poetry]

I like how you crack the word "crack". Things like that make poetry, I think.

[Edward Clay]

this could make for a nice haiku, but it looks as if it has exploded! haha. the style reminds me of a poet im a fan of alled patrick jones, who writes in this type of style almost throughout.

very nice description of sorrow, and even winter for that matter.