Morning Routine

idk?

When she puts on her tears in the morning—

            After brushing her teeth—

She always looks in the mirror

To make sure she has them

Balanced

            Just

                        Right

With the bubblegum pink

Shiny gloss on her lips

And the bashful blush of

Her cheeks and

            Black mascara

That

The tears are meant to wash away.

 

When she tries on her voice in the morning—

            Right after her water and cracker breakfast—

She always squints to

Make sure she has her

Plea

Tuned

            Just

                        Right

With the gaudy jewels around her

Vampire-enticing neck

And the daring stretch of

White stomach and

            The low blouse,

            Low smile

            And shamefully-short

            Skirt

That

The voice was meant to flatter.

 

Once her tears are balanced

And her voice is tuned

And she is

What they call

            Just right--

She gives a nod to the mirror

(Who knows her

            Secrets)

And walks out the door

With the click-click-click

Of

Important shoes.

 

Author's Note

who is this about?

Reviews

[Dressed in Poetry]

I like it. I love the last part especially, when she nods to the mirror. It seems so devious of her.

[Edward Clay]

i think there is posibly too much description on the dress of the eyes - and the masscarra. it feels over-done and gets a little tiring. it would benefit more with minimalism.

"Once her tears are balanced
And her voice is tuned
And they are both just right-
She is all right-"

the repetition of balance takes away the originality of the first use of it. maybe something else. another descriptive account. keep it fresh and new. and using right twice is distracting.

i especially liked the idea of important shoes. very nice. thats one of those thinsg i wish i had written, haha. all in all, a great poem and with a little work, something extra special.