Both you emotion and imagery are terrific. The first stanza really took hold of me and drew me in. "Until blood shed from my eyes is so vivid and dark, I love it. Great write.
Live ...Love...Learn. All a part of the growth. I caught the last line too but read between. Understood well what was being relayed. Saw that you corrected. lol
...and you'll get your just dessert
all in due time.
Aye! been there, done that.
Sometimes the alone part is the killer. Makes ya wonder if it's worth trying again. i think so. Wrote an article on breach of trust and another on forgiveness. Not sure about posting here, though...
You did much in few words.
Good job!
Thank you for pointing out that typo, my keyboard been sticking on me. It is meant to be now
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Ah, that's what I thought, lol. You managed to get a cross what you wanted in few lines. It was well.. read moreAh, that's what I thought, lol. You managed to get a cross what you wanted in few lines. It was well received in my book. I will be watching for more from you.
I have a poem up myself. I have been told that the style is Victorian rather than modern, but you may like it still. I hope anyway, lol. Give it a try when you can.
"The writer’s mind, can surpass even the most intellectual minds." –Adam M. Snow
I keep my work clean, I write to inspire others. Some people would even call me a philosopher, but w.. more..