Because of You

how child abuse destroyed one childs life

A little girl

Who's tattered and torn

Who hides the pain

Behind the mask

Who shows a smile

Everybody believes is real

No one sees

how black her soul is

What lies

beneath that smile

Because of you

She has to hide

The pain behind the mask

She lost the smile

That Everyone once loved

She's sick of living

This life of hatred

All because of you

A little girl dies

 

Author's Note

Tell me your honest opion

Reviews

[Keriun]

I love the ending part :) There's much impact there and I felt, WHOA. Hahaha but I think the part "Everybody believes is real. No one sees how black her soul is, what lies beneath that smile" is too long, which is off-rhythm. Everything else was short but it's too wordy in this part.
Oh, typo error: 2nd last line - "beacuse"

[Elijah J.]

"Whose tattered and torn" needs to be "Who's tattered and torn."

Otherwise, good. :)

E.

[Global Norskie]

wow, this is amazing. very powerful words.