A Happy Couple

Unrealistic fiction, though it may happen...

Her amber eyes encased his heart,

Like a prehistoric fly trapped in sap.

His calm blue eyes had a soft hue,

Like the inviting breeze that took her breath.

 

Loving him the moment they met,

She held his feelings in her heart.

Loving her once she said hello,

He cherished every moment with her.

 

Unexpected was the time he proposed,

Delighted, she could only say yes.

Unexpected was the moment she acceded,

Elated, he took her in his arms.

 

Together they lived, in a little apartment.

Making memories, both pleasant and dark.

Together they fought, living for tomorrow,

Continuing to love each other, every moment.

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

The thing that I liked about this one was the "two sides"...you have his thoughts and her thoughts, his action and her actions. This makes for something unique and creative. Perhaps it is just a dream, but it doesn't seem like an unachieveable one. We should all strive to live "Together they fought, living for tomorrow,/Continuing to love each other, every moment."-- no matter what happens, we should love each other every moment.

I think that perhaps there might be a way to make the flow a little better...I'm thinking separating the stanzas so that each stanza is one of the person's thoughts instead of couplets in the same stanza. Just a thought, by no means necessary. Well done, though.

[Soma-ko]

Why thank you. I personally like it better when they're place in the same stanza because they are related to each other, and you can see how they felt during the same time in the right away. I'm glad you liked it, and I'll think about the flow part, (had a little trouble with that while writing).

[NA]

This is so beautifully idyllic Soma...really enjoyed this tender piece :) x

[SyberRose]

I had a friend once who said that she and her husband never had an argument...means they never had to make up...so sad haa...it is so nice to make up...what a boring life she must of had ha..Enjoyed Soma:)

[Soma-ko]

Haha, it is, and the fact that you do make up, means that the bond between them two is so much stronger than it normally would be. It's better to fight everyday, but love each other regardless, then 'love' someone each day, never fighting at all. In a way, the fighting is a sense of closeness, where you are comfortable enough with the other party, to fight with them, knowing that no matter the issue, there is enough faith, that they can resolve it. Glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for reading. :)