If I Asked.

If if and more if's.

If I asked you for your hand,

would you place it in mine?

If I asked you do I look okay,

would you say I look fine?

 

 

If I called you in the middle of the night,

what would you do?

if I didn't stop talking,

would you let me continue?

 

 

But I can't do all these things,

there's a wall in the way,

it's invisible, though

but I feel it every day.

 

 

It blocks me from saying anything,

freezes me in step,

so i watch you walk by,

why not a galnce at me perhaps?

 

 

Your presence stuns me,

my words get caught in my throat,

all the air I breathe,

doesn't go down, it gets stuck before the hole.

 

 

Tell me, 

how can you have this affect one a human being?

Do you practice? Train?

Or does it just come naturally?

 

 

Either one is fine,

whatever you chose to do,

all I know is that I'll never be good enough,

to be as close as they are to you

Author's Note

Another poem I've written :)

Reviews

[steph]

This poem is very cute and sweet, Its got an adoreable quality to it and its spiritual wisdom far exceeds the innocent expressions.. its fantastic.. my favorite vearse:
Your presence stuns me,
my words get caught in my throat,
all the air I breathe,
doesn't go down, it gets stuck before the hole.

Very sweet and adoreable, my favorite

[Nat.]

This is very good :) But in the first stanza to keep the flow going you could take out "i look" and just keep "fine" so it would read "would you say fine"

[Samantha (:]

OH MY GOD. How do you read my mind with your poetry? Like, all of your poems are everything I feel or wish I felt. Oh my gosh. The first 2 stanza didn't flow as much as the rest did, but, yeah, I'm in love with your writing. Just saying.

[Ni1408]

This works well in song

[Beth Wilcox]

I love this, very creative and very emotional. I loveddd it.

[cfix]

That If word is a pretty powerful word.
This is very well written. I like this

[Steven Cetta]

It captures a feeling that we all have, like a sense of insecurity or awkwardness. I like it

[Lindsey]

I really like this. It shows the amazing affect of what people can do to others. It's great.

[Midnight_Mystery]

one of my favs by you so far! :)

[Karli]

this could be a song, honestly. good work:)