cold frightful May

Grief in May

I will welcome grief today

And hold it, hug it, kiss it.

may I sleep of it

may I die of it

Like my beloved did.

In this cold, frightful May.

 

Let my memory wander

In the depths of solitude.

may I laugh of it

may I cry of it

Like my faint smile.

In this cold, frightful May.

Reviews

[Shannon]

The repetition is very powerful. The heart ache palpable, without the poem being over the top.
Are you interested in small suggestions?

[Somnium]

yes please

[Shannon]

"my loved one" trips up the flow. I would either use "my beloved" or use the actual relationship to you "my.....".
If this is true, I am very sorry.

[Somnium]

it is not true, but thank you for the suggestion

[Shannon]

Then it is very convincing, so good work!