Ghosts of Time

Wrote this for a friend.

Silver shadows line the halls
these ghostly figures loom
listen to their unearthly calls,
the anguish of their doom

Specters made of pale moon light
they linger in the dark
their anger will only fuel their might
and pierce your mortal heart

For time has forsaken them all,
the forgotten and the damned,
and if you hear their ghostly call
you will perish by their hands

The fallen ones they want respite,
their malice knows no bounds,
they will grasp your soul, still you with fright

and scorch these fertile lands 

Time will never threaten them,
these children of the dark
their sacrifice has bound them,
to the darkness in your heart 

Reviews

[Tina Louise UK]

Wonderful dark creepy read...love the pic too! :) x

[SonOfPlunder]

Thank you again Tia, glad you liked!

[RAOrourke]

Pacing and rhythm were wonderful, very good job with this poem

[SonOfPlunder]

Thank you very much :)

[ThatDude]

Hey there! I loved reading your poem, the pacing and rhyme was maintained quite well, all the way through to the end; so good job. The poem kind of left me wanting to know more about these facinating ghostly specters, as they weren't really described in detail that much (That was probably your intention) I definitely wouldn't mind reading a second poem telling more of these dark creatures. Thanks for sharing.

[SonOfPlunder]

Thank you very much, glad you liked it. I actually wrote this for someone who i had to keep it fairly short, but i could always make a part two :)

[Relic]

This is a great horror poem that embodies the heart of the genre. The theme is consistent and the diction accurate. The rhythm in the 3rd paragraph first two lines made me stumble. 4th paragraph--bounds and lands don't rhyme unless that was your intent. Hands and damned don't really rhyme either but that's just me nit picking.

Overall, despite my critique, this is a really nice job. 100/100

[SonOfPlunder]

Thank you very much, i am trying to do my part to keep it alive! I did struggle slightly with those parts, but i thought instead of deconstructing it, i would keep it as it was, as i often find that it doesn't have to rhyme exactly to have a good flow about it. Really glad you enjoyed it

[Relic]

You're welcome and I did.

[chaotic katie]

Amazing poem. i'm really into this kind of stuff and you don't see poems like this often. can't wait to read more of your work.

[SonOfPlunder]

I agree with you, this style of dark poetry is seriously lacking, i am doing my best to keep it alive :) Glad you enjoyed it

[Adam Osborne]

I have to say you have a wonderful knack for poetry, sir. Your comfort in this genre shows. You take the ABAB style and use it to your advantage. Excellent flow and word choices.

[SonOfPlunder]

Thank you very much! I have to say i am more comfortable writing this kind of poetry, it comes to me more naturally than story writing seems to. Glad you enjoyed it

[Rob Santana]

Damn Son this is killer. Your new profile pic is sick!!! Keep em coming my friend.

[SonOfPlunder]

Hah, thanks Rob, much appreciated man. I made that photo with the walking dead app on my phone, well worth checking out, some of them are gruesome

[Kasey Miriam]

This was deep and haunting, great job Thank you for sharing

[SonOfPlunder]

Very welcome, glad you enjoyed reading it!