Ballad Of Jane Doe

Ballad Of Jane Doe

A Poem by SoulCrusader (Yas)
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Inspired by a friends poem called 'Ode to Kali'

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She washed herself with vinegar…..

to wash away the strain

to wash away the pain

to wash away the loneliness

to wash away the emptiness

 

 

The devil held out a warm hand…..

she lusted after lechery

she lusted after treachery

she lusted after bitterness

she lusted after abusiveness

 

 

On her deathbed, the devil laughed and deserted her

All alone she lay, wires sticking out of her

Angels descended from heaven, said “For heaven’s sake let your pride go!”

She saw the light and accepted God…..Doctors pronounced the death of Jane Doe.

© 2011 SoulCrusader (Yas)


Author's Note

SoulCrusader (Yas)
I think people turn out the way they do sometimes simply because they are a victim of circumstance. Hopefully someday even if its at last moments they get redeemed on some level!

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This was so amazing. I really love this. The emotions within this piece were really well portrayed. I can feel the pain, emptiness, loneliness, and strain that she is feeling. I could feel her death as well. I love the imagery to this as well. Good job. Thanks for sharing. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


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A very sad, tragic haunting poem with a wonderful and uplifting ending. I really enjoyed this!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This poem gives you the feeling of how somebody who has nobody to remember them can feel. If you're all alone, or feel as though you are, you are all there is... This is one of the saddest pieces I've read in a good few years. Very well done... =)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Simply magnificent, haunting and builds up to a blistering ending stanza. 100!!!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great Poem!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wow this seems bit powerful especially at the end "Doctors pronounced the death of Jane Doe." it was interesting in a way too and hopeful, really great write.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Love this poem, good emotion within the piece, which the reader can feel

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was a very good poem!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Interesting... I liked it a lot. Thank you so much for sharing. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this alot...it's really good (:

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on June 10, 2011
Last Updated on December 24, 2011
Tags: poem, faith, redemption, choices

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SoulCrusader (Yas)
SoulCrusader (Yas)

Badlands, Yorkshire, United Kingdom



About
Hi, I'm Yas, 28, from England UK. What do I do in my spare time? Well, I sit at home and perform good deeds :) Please note: When I write poems, don't assume they are all regarding current event/.. more..

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