Solitude

 

in a 4x4x4 room

no light, no tv, no tables or chairs

or other solid comforts

found in material things..

just you

in the middle of a cold floor- biting your skin

to remind you how unwanted you are

the walls seem sound proof- starring blankly back at you

the darkness- so empty your eyes ache

straining to lay rest on some kind of shapeliness

the walls could cave in on top of you

the earth beneath you could quake

and you’d wonder if anyone would even hear

your world turning against you

the air is suffocating

you are choke in the loneliness

of your own wrestles soul…

in that moment

you realize the world rotates just fine

without your balance within it

and the hands of time just like

the energizer bunny

go on and on

your existence hasn’t a seconds effect

on the gears of the forever turning clock

called life

you can’t stop it

and

it doesn’t need you

hours go by

you are alone

no one’s calling you on the phone

to ask if you are all right

no one’s blowing the fog horn

or sounding the alarm

they’re playing cards with their friends

talking for hours with their lovers

playing with their babies

hugging their mothers

laughing, crying, smiling, smirking

talking and carousing away

with someone

somewhere else

and you

you have no one

you are no where

 

you’re alone

with your loneliness

Author's Note

I had a realization one day when i was laying in a ditch for hours... no one was coming for me.. no one was even looking for me... hours upon hours and not even one call on my cell... i've never felt so alone that day. And now.. now that's how i feel when my love is not with me.

Reviews

[Gandré]

this was like reading a poetic diary, impression, impression, impression. like a bouquet of words on the table after fighting the fog. thanks for sharing. regards.

[Kees Kapteyn]

This is only your imagination getting away from you. You need to steer away from these thoughts because they are neither legitimate nor helpful. Being with your love is indeed the most wonderful feeling in the world- I'd be the first person to tell you that- but loneliness depends on your own perception- you can let your negative thoughts carry away, or you can carry yourself through it.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Oh wow you really no how to create an impact of emotions...damn i know I ca relate to this... those times when no one seems to be around you can feel isolated even if the day before you were surrounded by friends. Seriously so well written, I felt alone just reading it.

[Brandon]

This is a powerful write. Loneliness is a horrible thing to live with. Nice job on this piece.

[J. A. Svercek]

I know this feeling really well, and your imagery in the beginning of the poem is fantastic. However it trails off towards the end and almost starts repeating itself. I think it could be compacted and therefore be a much stronger, tighter piece.

Thanks for writing,
J.

[Mr. Lopez]

The depth of pain that goes along with being cast away from society to be forgotten is well felt in this dark poem. I couldn't help but imagine that this is also how a person must feel when a single mistake takes from them all that they love in life, to be locked away and forgotten. Very sad . If you had the power to do this to someone , would you? Or would you offer them forgiveness? I still believe in the power of love. Great poem !!!

Mr.Lopez

[just is]

This is such a sad piece i can feel your emotion you poured out in this. It hurts to be trapped alone. Makes you feel unwanted or unloved. I can feel this write and it's very sad and scary really to feel that way. I can feel this write from your heart.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

This is really a sad poem/situation to be in. Very well written, you can feel the isolation. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Meradee]

This reminds me of a period of my life when really truly I felt alone. No one seemed to recognize my plight and because of this I sunk deeper and deeper into my lonely existence.
This is very well written the description is wonderful. I felt everything.
Pepper...