let me in sweet darlin'

you race though my veins
like a manic fire truck
my eyes smoking from the engine
of your torrid passion
fire hoses squirting out my skin
let me in sweet darlin'
fling the ladder from your pounding heart
climb into my vacant mind
strip me naked and fling me
into your bubbling inferno
your liquid lava seething
every sweet cell breathing me in
as I slowly rise,
and dive into your
silky undulations
microscopic penetrations
wrap yourself around me
and catapult me deep
into your long forgotten sleep
let me in sweet darlin'
envelop me completely
my senses scintillating
corpuscles palpitating
drown me with your magic potion
breathe me like a dragon
soak me with your moist emotion
and lift my heart
high
into the tranquil eye
of your whirling swirling hurricane
let me in sweet darlin

Reviews

[Bertie]

Wow, incredibly raw and racey ! I enjoyed it, the words seem tangible and I can almost taste them coming off my tongue ! It was even better the second time through as reading it again brought to light the subtleties of the piece that I'd missed the first time, having been so astounded and swept away by the pace and electric energy of the piece.
I really enjoyed this :)

[Farrah Grahm]

Hmmmmm,,,,,,,,as a general rule I tend to stray away from big bright flashing double entendrres. And as a general rule I like to be as honest as possible in a review. This isn't my favorite but it definitely exhibits ur talent your love of wordplay and ur passion.which is why I want to be honest, you've shown talent that makes it clear you wouldn't benefit from a patronizing "god job!" Ill keep reading.

[Dupree]

The imagery in this is amazing. You my friend have a way with words.

[Janice Ann]

Absolutely beautiful! A story of short words that take me on a beautiful journey! Beautiful passion in this piece. Thank you for sharing.

[Ruth]

So passionate and raw at the same time, if that makes sense lol Perfectly balanced, love it! xx

[KAREN]

Wow! Written with passion and love, The imagery makes this poem come alive!

[Audrey Howitt]

I really liked this one! Beautifully written and lots of great imagery!

[Francesca]

Wow! I love your word choice and imagery. Great flow too.
Really nice poem :)

[Sukriti Suki]

Good one!!! made me smile many times...I like the imagery here...good one!