Part 2: The Chores of life

The magic of laundry =)

I created a world

Where I could escape

The dreams of fear

Over there. Missing here.

 

I watched the clock

Dry ticks of time

Mind rocks, fatigue, voices talk

All it is: a silent mime.

 

I opened the closet

No magical land

Narnia lost. Just movies, sets.

(Really decade-old mats)

Eternal time, time and sand

 

Sieved through a net

That held your dreams

Don’t forget

The seamless streams

 

Of uniforms, ties and all

Rumbling in a loud, loud groan

The imagery of machinery

The scream, the beep the final groan

Look now, laundry’s done, rips sewn.

 

Folded clothes, cleaned and steamed

And the iron hot, fresh and used

(Or so it seemed).

Just iron board, boredom rowed

Tireless chores,

WHAT?

 

Some more.

Author's Note

Part 2 of the series! Inspiration: Doing piles of leftover laundry

Reviews

[Kat Collins]

I love the inspiration! You make the mundane come to life and seem so magical!

[Caitlin Lea]

This is quite good. I actually find it to be rather humorous. I appreciate how the lines build in length and intensity and shorten again at the end. I almost hear the hum of the dryer and then the "ding" of the timer when it finishes. I also noticed that, just like a lot of your work, you have used rhyme here seamlessly. It flows wonderfully, without feeling contrived. Quite a good piece here. :-)

[Daniel88Batson]

I agree with the comment below. This and the previous make such simple things sound incredibly fascinating. Such a quality. keep on it. =D

[Jeremy Baker]

You make something so mundane seem so full of potential - immensely enjoyable to read!

[alexis]

steph,
this is really good.i liked it a lot

[FemmeSpookyCorpse]

I loved this! Fantastic way of making chores seem mystical. Your word choice was great and really made the essence of the poem greater...wonderful work!

[Aidz]

Laundry never looked that good... never lol ... kewl scribe

[rose with love]

this is very nice and interesting how you managed to create the fantasy from an ordinary thing. I guess it's true: simple things really do inspire you. great work!

[Blessed_Angel]

this poem was unique. I like how you put feeling in to it. Good job. :)