�Flowers On A Cliff Top�

A fish in a huge sea
Trying to attract the attention of a passer by
That fish lost on an endless horizon
Attempted to jump out of deep waters-
All to get you to notice

We place down a bouquet
A lovely spray
A colourful display
To show how much we miss her.

I’d have done anything
To stop her from drowning in waves
I’d have done anything
To stop her from breathing too quickly
I’d have given any limb
To have her back from killer seas…

Once I saw a fish wishing to be just like you-
Looking so wonderful
And swimming with a breeze
Once I saw a fish looking up at me-
But I didn’t have any of the answers
I guess now she’s completed…and still
Drawing the last of air from the sky above
She was finally in love with something

So I place down a bouquet
A lovely spray
A colourful display
To show how much I miss her.
 

Reviews

[R. Gene MacDonald]

NIce tribute there, is it about anyone specific? Once again I love your style my friend, so smooth and seemingly effortless, like your pen is singing to us.

[Gandré]

oh dear ....that s wonderful !!!!

I enjoy your yearning for her....poetic and remaining.

[T. L. O'Neal]

I enjoyed this poem and the repeat of the second and last stanza worked very well. Kudos T

[Brianna Brie]

I feel grief and sadness from this poem. There is also hope that somehow the fish is one with the woman lost in the sea. Nice write.

[Angelheaded Hipster]

Once I saw a fish looking up at me-
But I didn�t have any of the answers

I like this...It's like a spin on The Little Mermaid. I mean, that's the impression I'm getting off this. Very Hans Cristian Andsersen.
Great imagery, and such longing....Impressive little ode to the sea.

[Gary H]

Awesome work Steven. Really did enjoy this and thanks for posting.

Drawing the last of air from the sky above
She was finally in love with something

These were easily my favourite lines although to be honest I could have picked a lot more.
The stanza in the middle is so cool as well.
Looking forward to more!