Nobody...(The Enemy)

simply thoughts...hope u enjoy

 

Nobody hears when my soul cries

Drenched spirit, dry eyes

Head high, soul low

Smiling hard, but no glow

 

Nobody feels when my heart hurts

When happiness converts

And sadness occurs

Turning all of my dreams into blurs

 

No one wants to understand…

Nor do they feel the need to

Look into my eyes and see who…

I really am…

 

I myself have lost my own identity for so long

My body no longer feels like home 

Just a shell…with empty spirits

A place where loneliness often visits

 

Vacationing in my pain…

Bathing in my sorrow

Fertilized from my tears of rain

Blooming into my tomorrows

 

Leaving me lost in a jungle of insecurities

Wishing and praying for God’s purities

As well as direction…protection

I stand at the intersection

 

Lost between stop and go

I coast along life’s paths slow

Confused as well as confined

Prisoner of self…soul doing time

 

Because nobody offered a hand or a little bit of understanding

In this life of mine that’s so demanding

Commanding all of my thoughts…all of my dignity

Turning me against myself…I stand as the enemy

Reviews

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Very well and cleverly written. I'm sure sometimes we all feel like we are all alone when a problem arises...even when we have the hand of a loved one. This poem was very beautiful. Your work is excellent!

[J.P.O.et]

A very hearfelt poem that i did enjoy. I truly understand addiction and the dark place it brings us.
I felt the blaming of others for not understanding or offering a hand but in the end you break it down
and see that only you are 'the enemy'. I really like your description of 'A place where loneliness often visits', and these ensuing lines are great,
'Vacationing in my pain...
Bathing in my sorrow
Fertilized from my tears of rain
Blooming into my tomorrows'
Keep up the good writing as an outlet as you say.

J.P.O.et

[Bella-Marie]

This was a great poem, but some of the rhyming words seemed slightly... forced, I could say. Also, there was a bit of a beat, but it was broken by long/short scentences. All in all, it was awesome. Keep it up!

[yo]

Very well written, great flow, enjoyed every line of it! Check out my poem titled "Conflicting Thoughts", you may find uncanny similarities. Take care.

Gus O.

[Dizzy-Izzy]

Like this, it's very good