Silent Stillness

Heart pounding, break out in sweat

Eyes spring open, nothing seen yet

Total blackness, not a finger of light

Something out there, but nothing found

 

Breath held, I'm motionless

Ears straining to hear a sound

Senses alert, eyes darting around

Deathly silence, too deathly still

 

Fear grips my emotions

I hate being alone in the dark

My sanctuary invaded

The tears spring to my eyes

 

When will the fear pass me

All these years alone should be trained

To the common occurence of a woman alone

Yet the darkness is constant

 

Not just in my home

The darkness inside my mind

Escape is hard to find

Strength and courage is needed

 

I'm tired of the battle

To find the light in my life

My thoughts fly to you

My light in my battle with darkness

Author's Note

I can't deny my light... :)

Reviews

[Jessica Benfield]

this is amazing! you have very stong imagery in the beginning - you could almost feel the hairs on the back of your neck rise, just thinkong about what could lie in the darkness. nie write, i enjoied this one =]
smiles,
jess

[Tony Hwilka]

Very well written poem.
Do you really need the last two lines?
2nd line in the last stanz leave out -- the
Just my opinion.

Tony

[Bhavya Kaushik]

"My light in my battle with darkness"

This is great! Exceptionally well!
The raw emotions behind it are very appealing and that is why it is such a passionate writing.
Great work and so thoughtful indeed!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Wow you really know how to show just how deep love and all the wonderful things it can do... I am in complete amazement at the emotional power in your words, I am almost rendered me speechless.

[D. Nelson]

this is very strongly worded.and the first part has great imagery that actually mad me feel a little antsy myself lol

[Marvin Lewis Jr.]

This is powerful!
I loved the metaphors and the imagery they birthed...
I admire the way you wrote this piece enabling me as the reader to see beauty in sadness.
I enjoyed reading!

[Albert Freeman]

Awww shucks. Well long as I'm one of those new fangled lights that go bright as day and last for eons. :)

I'll take the darkness and tell it to get going!

[Susan]

Melanie,
I can so identify with your poem.. Both the darkness in us and the struggle for the light...Sometimes it is right before our very eyes and we dont see the light. Other times, we have to step back from ourselves to see what is rigth in front of us. Yes, i can feel the darkness within, and fight it too.
Thanks for a well written poem.
Susan

[Bear]

I think we all "fight this battle" at one level or another; and yes, the fear, tears, lack of courage and strength overwhelm us at times unexpected, and for me... I just let the tears and emotions flow and "take over" to vent them so I may regain my composure and strength and continue on best I can. Find the light within, light a candle, follow the moon and stars, we just have to keep on going and marking our way.

Gee, you struck a cord in me with this one!! Didn't ya? ;~)
Catch ya later.
Sallie Bear