Charred Flower of A Lone Gardener

I have let this flower bloom in me,
To my ignominy I let it full-fledged blossom,
I am its lone gardener,
And alone I’ll walk in my garden
When I dream my raison detre
Within it, within the flower I let bloom.
I watered, paid days and nights
Though none came to touch, none to smell
But I know how graceful my flower has bloomed.
Why I know not on a day
She came in my garden.
She sniffed at my flower
There, my flower turned a colour,
With her breath, no rainbow shone as did my flower,
She touched her petals, I could listen her giggle,
I, too shy to behold her closely, gathered my courage oneday...
She was in my garden again.
Slowly I strode to her.
I didn’t get nearer when she turned
To me amazed at her beauty
But away she faded into thin air
I saw my flower charred and lonely…

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I like your poem. Comparing life and a garden is easy. Both need love and care. The poem story was kind and beautiful. The ending was sad. Charred and lonely isn't a good place to be. A excellent poem.
Coyote

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such powerful emotions in this. Like the comparrisons!

[Sujash I. Purna]

I owe an explanation here. It was written when I was distraught by my first love. Couple of mistakes; this is possible when you are sad and emotion brims over the words. And yes she came and got trapped in my emotion and I didn't know what was there in me so that she came here...to walk in my garden of love.

Thank you everyone for reading this one. Glad to see so much support. Thank you.

[Vaidehi]

Oh... All of life's joys are like that.. momentary.. Nice one..

[Sukriti Suki]

a nice one again..though I got a bit confused with the lines '

Why I know not on a day
She came in my garden.
She sniffed at my flower

I got a bit confused here. did she come? Why I know not on a day...somewhat needs to be changed a bit. otherwise the imagery is very good.

[Vanessa Rico]

I have to agree with both reviewers on this one, great comparisons and imagery. Stunning poem!

[Little Abbey]

Nice comparisons!

[DoubtReality]

there are a couple of grammatical errors in this one, but it's still very good nonetheless. i love the flower and garden imagery, comparing beauty and life to the flower was excellent.