kinda Shayari..

Not magical but it's intentional meaning is worthy for me and to you may be...

Rabb ki ruh basi hai
Insaano ki dil mein
Bus aankhon me jaadoo
Ki kami hai dekhne liye..

Log kehte hai,

Gulzaaro me kuch jaado hai
Jin ki awaaz se log muskuraane lagte hai,
Par dil se muskuraane ki awaaz me
Kuch jaado hai, jisse me badal jaata hu..

Kehte hai,

Sukh dukh me saath raho,
Par me bolta hu,
Sukh me mujhe yaad karo,
Dukhi me kabhi chod nahi sakta hu..

Reviews

[Bala Gorthi]

A very good promise penned in beautiful words.

[Surya]

Hope so...Thank you Bala for your kind visit and words..am glad for themm...:)

[Priyanshi]

Surya , I love reading shayari too much . it was a great one.

[Surya]

Thank you so much Priyanshi...:)

[horizon]

ooohhhh was that a commitment i won't leave you alone in grief or sorrows...nice

[Surya]

Yeah..kind of....Thank you..:)

[Abhishek Asthana]

nicely tried...you are learning in a learning phase...the aura of this poem is good...i believe one day you will become proficient in writing hindi pieces as well... keep writing

[Surya]

Yeah, still learning....MAy be one day..Thank you Abhishek.

[writ rajat]

Bus aankhon me jaadoo
Ki kami hai dekhne ke liye

[writ rajat]

Rabb ki ruh basi hai
Insaano ke dil mein

[writ rajat]

sabdo ka intihaan mat liya karo warna ghalib prakat ho jaega

[writ rajat]

bahut mistakes hai yaar thora sudhaaro waise koshish achi kiye ho quran padho hindi me phir kiuch urdu jaan jaoge

[Surya]

That's how it is and why am here, everyone praises but none says, Rajat could you please correct them and mail me if possible...Thanks a lot Rajat for your kind visit and pointing out...:)

[Manasa.L]

There are some structural mistakes but a good poem, I liked it.
Ki kami hai dekhne 'ke' liye..
'Dukh' me kabhi chod nahi sakta hu.
I hope you don't mind for me being critic.

[Surya]

No Not at all, You can, always, Thank you Manasa for your visit...:)

[Wajiha Nayeem]

wowwieee surya!
great work....

[Surya]

Thank you Wajiha...:)

[Wajiha Nayeem]

pleasure suryaa...