In your shoes

I look at you,

All alone.

I see sadness,

Deep in your eyes.

All around you,

The world goes by.

But yet theres still that sadness,

Deep in your eyes.

I put myself in your shoes,

And see me standing there.

There tight and uncomfy,

But yet you just don't care.

"What is wrong?

Why a face so long?"

"Never you mind,

But if you must know,

Theres someething I want you to find.

It's hidden somewhere beyond worlds end,

But before the worlds beggining.

It's the only thing that keeps us apart,

It's the key to my weeping heart.

Author's Note

I'm sad right now. Life is cruel.

Reviews

[Priscilla Sayers]

A beautiful flow and you are right life is cruel, at times, and then there are always the moments inbetween the rough patches that give clarity and promise to new beginnings and brighter tomorrows. Chin up.
You got a beautiful poem from heartache and now you have had release:)

[Little Birdie]

So sad, yet so lovely :)

[Sarah]

it is sad yet so lovely. Nice work

[Aianarie (INACTIVE)]

Wow, I really loved this. It's quite simple, but the thoughts that it provokes are so complex! Great job.

[Priscilla Sayers]

Perk up lil' one. Great poem. Your sorrow spills smoothly across the page.

[paparapapa]

I think it's really hard to reach out to someone when he or she is the one who is actually closing himself/herself to the world. If you want someone to understand you, then what better way there is than to express yourself. That's just what I think though. Anyway, I love how you repeated the sadness in the eyes. It added to the feeling of loneliness of that person. Also, the "tight and comfy" comment was a smart move. Meaningful and can be a subject to different interpretations. Oh, don't forget to add the closing quotation mark for your dialogue. Since this is a pretty short poem, the typos and such are more obvious, so polish it more. But I loved how you ended it. Great job. :)

[Shattered Dreams]

And, 'if you must know', my key is hidden in multiple places. Only a fool will be able to find the whole key since I didn't hide it far, but a true friend will find only one piece. The idiots will fight for their space to only be dissapointed. I will never let anyone get too close to my heart since I know that one day I will only have to let go. Why should I indulge myself if I know I'm going to have a tough time when it's gone?
Like I let things in my past into my heart, and now they're just memories. I made mistakes, and I know I did, so I moved the key somewhere different. Try to find it. Tell me when you do. Tell me where you found it.