Star-Seeing and Open Windows

Star-Seeing and Open Windows

A Poem by TadKent
"

Lyrics to a song I wrote. Wish you could hear me play it. ; )

"

 

Marie saw a star

Somewhere not far from here

It winked out goodbye,

as it sailed through the sky...

 

Somwhere on Earth

A little girl started to smile.

It stretched far and wide,

anyone could see it for miles.

 

Maybe you'll see her,

Lookin' out her window?

Searching for hope

Or maybe a star-show...

Maybe a star-show?

 

Brad saw the sun

It was a little too bright for his eyes

He only came out at night,

Where he knew he could hide...

 

Alone in his room,

A little boy started to cry.

Face to the bed,

He'd always wonder why?

 

Maybe you'll see him

Lookin' out his window?

Searching for hope

Or maybe a star-show...

Maybe a star-show?

 

Maybe you'll see me

Lookin' out my window?

Searching for hope

Or maybe a star-show...

Maybe a star-show?

© 2010 TadKent


Author's Note

TadKent
Better with piano. = ]

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"It winked out goodbye,
as it sailed through the sky..."
I really like this part a lot. I like the whole poem of course, but I don't know, I really like that part. I can imagine it easily. The ending is brilliant too. Great poem. I'd love to hear it with the piano going along with it. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I really liked your poem. It was lovely, it almost sounded like a song. Great job!

Posted 10 Years Ago


I liked it. You could youtube it.
I think I may have liked it better had you used "Marie saw A star." I may not be the best critic of poetry, and I'll be the first to admit that. I don't want you to change it if you already feel it is complete. That's your writing, not mine.
I know it probably seems silly, but that single letter word would make a difference to me. All in all it is very artistic I must say.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I loved that! It sounded like a song to me and I adored it. My middle name is "Marie" so that part definitely caught my attention. :3 I love this piece just as much as "Places," but while the other did imagery, I can feel emotions from this one. Wonderful job!

Posted 10 Years Ago


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I think this is a beuatiful write here.
Flows so well and has rhythm.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Yes, these seem like good lyrics, I'd love to hear them with the music. Piano, you say? Awesome, I've been trying to learn myself for more than a year, it's the best instrument there is besides its portability, the range allows for some awesome song writing. But I ramble... Yeah, it really isn't worth critiquing without the complete package though. You should upload the song to youtube or something, then post it here.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"It winked out goodbye,
as it sailed through the sky..."
I really like this part a lot. I like the whole poem of course, but I don't know, I really like that part. I can imagine it easily. The ending is brilliant too. Great poem. I'd love to hear it with the piano going along with it. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love it.
Searching for hope in the sky, such an activity of mine when I was a kid.
Sends me back there.
I'm sure it's just awesome with piano.

Posted 10 Years Ago


These words are sweet. I'm curious...what is the music like that goes with this?

Posted 10 Years Ago


I really like how this gave me images all through the piece, I could see the whole thing flowing in my mind with every word, you did a great job and you show a lot of talent! :)
Good work, keep it up

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love this, it really brings images to my head! Beautiful.

Posted 10 Years Ago



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