Beautiful Sky

There's a beautiful sky, in my eyes. That's my world.

I sit on the ground, open up my eyes,
Under the sky within my bright smile.
Watching the bird that fly so high,
This is my world, my beautiful sky.
Sometimes it's rain, sometimes it's snow,
No matter where you go, you're under your sky.
There's not always a beautiful smile,
Head up to the sky, you'll be alright.
Look straight to my way, All I see just black and white,
It's like my life just sad and happiness.
I might end up and lost myself,
But I still believe that I can do it.

Author's Note

Please excuse some grammar and spelling mistakes. Thanks! ♡

Reviews

[JBoone]

This is beautiful. Well done. Great imagery. Keep your eyes wide open.

[Jessica]

I'll try my best next time!! Thank you :)

[DoormanDan]

There's some interesting symbolism here. I've never thought of one's emotional (and overall mental state) as being a sky, but I immediately see the connection, and like that comparison. What you write is true, sometimes our skies are filled with dark storm clouds, and other times it's filled with sunlight and hummingbirds. It all tends to depend on the atmosphere and other things, doesn't it? Interesting piece. Keep on writing! :)

[Jessica]

Thanks for this lovely review!! I'm so glad that you like it. And well, When I wrote it, it was a heavy raining out here. That's why this poet came out. :)

[DoormanDan]

Inspiration can come from anything at any time. It's good to see that you utilize it whenever you are given the opportunity!

[Jessica]

I'm so glad that you like it too. :) I was a bit afraid when I was writing it and get ready to upload.

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice flow of thoughts. I like the journey and the description of life near. I liked the hope in the ending also. I believe life is what we make it. Good or bad. Our decision. Thank you Jessica for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Jessica]

Hehehe, I'm so glad to you like it :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I did like the poetry.

[AliciaB]

Another very uplifting piece. I love the image in the first few lines: "I sit on the ground, open up my eyes, / Under the sky within my bright smile." You present a dynamic and complex perspective of the meaning of the sky to you, expressing both happiness and sorrow/struggles. I love the line "This is my world, my beautiful sky," as well as the idea that "No matter where you go, you're under your sky." I like the repetition of "sky" and "beautiful" and "smile" throughout this poem. The rhyme scheme is cool - not particularly defined (which of course it totally fine, as it's a poem and you can do whatever you want! :) ), but there are a lot of "I" sounds (as in "high", "sky", "smile", "white", etc.) I like fact that the final line of the poem does not contain a rhyme like this, but instead ends in the word "it", a sound that is not prevalent elsewhere in the piece. This sets this line apart and emphasizes its message, which I enjoy for its hopefulness and positivity. Very nicely written!

[Jessica]

I'm so glad that you reviewed on my poem! This is really nixe and I love it when you like it! Thank you so much! ♡

[AliciaB]

You are most welcome! :)

[Jessica]

I'm so glad :)