Pleasing Poison

Furling a piece of foil

into a hollow little roll

he puffs pleasing poison;

sleeps isolated from realism

There are pipe dreams in his eyes,

brightens when twilight disappears

His comatose brain films radiant reveries

at night, within his mind’s stilled senses

Ordeals of failure constrained him to shut

the shop of sterling virtues residing in his heart

Switched it to exhibition of aggressive notions;

inaugurated bad blood between him and life

When he finds no pleasing poison,

lacerating arms calms him down

Thirst and hunger abandoned

He’s a spectacular skeleton

in loneliness’s grave

  sans elation

Reviews

[pinhead07]

I really enjoyed reading this, I was a heroin addict, started with smoking it in cigarettes, then chasing the dragon and then injecting it, fortunately listened to the voice of reason and quit a couple of years ago, this poem really captures all that really well, pleasing poison indeed, you really start losing it in quite a short amount of time, try to quit but it's just too difficult to quit and stay off it for good, lacerating arms and all, I've been there, haha, withdrawal is the worst, nothing calms you down, too tired to walk, painful to sit, can't sleep, eat nothing, until the next fix, glad I got off it, anyway, I'm rambling, this is well written.

[¿]

These scenes are so familiar to me and all that you said are totally understood. I find a little baby-like soul trapped in an addicted persons body fluttering to be free, getting angry without any reason and sleeping most of the time, laughing anyway! Your victory over this poison is tremendously appreciated, Am so happy for each person who does so. Thank you for sharing your ramblings, it was a pleasure to hear, Be blessed and smile =)

[emmajoy]

' He’s a spectacular skeleton - in loneliness’s grave - sans elation '

That anyone can find a means of creating beauty about addiction is beyond my understanding.. and yet, you have. Not sure what to say except your skill with words - especially these, is incredible, visiual and yet in some strange way, unique, stripped of subtlety.. the theme remains ugly and not magical.. yet you've cushioned its sin. Perhaps.

[¿]

Hi Emma! I think all the sins and goods of this earth are worth to be praised...and so I gave a try towards that saying....I thank you so much for being here and sharing your words upon our writings...Galore love to you🍓

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and each time the brain gets more comatose...the skeleton with less bone...loneliness is the digger of the grave he has put himself in...
the shop of optimism, definitely closed for repair.
j.

[¿]

I've seen many people who lost their life due to drug addiction....and a few who came back from that dreamy place by learning a grave lesson....Thanks a lot dear Jacob for being with me and us.... Br blessed🌟

[Tony]

Indeed, people take drugs to feel good, but in reality they are a
"skeleton
in loneliness's grave
sans elation"

and unfortunately to the drug user drugs are "Pleasing Poison"
I enjoyed reading your work. Write on!

[¿]

Haaa... a slowed down poison also...
Am really grateful to you for reading my piece...Will be fluttering here again like I used to but, let the exams be done first!...tiring...😅...
I thank you so much dear Tony...Be blessed =)

[Lavi]

Wow. This blew my mind. The imagery and wonder for what comes next intrigued me and the final line. Deep.

[¿]

Thanks so much Lavi for your valuable words....it's been days I've seen you here...hope you're well and fit!💕

[Neville]

These fine words are most deserving of the 27 sets of individual review comments they have so far notched up.. I shall be the 28th contributor and am proud to have found them before they hit treble figures, as I'm sure in time they will .. the visual appeal also adds to the readers enjoyment as its form resembles a tear a broken ampule maybe and the bowl of a chillum or crack pipe.. thoroughly enjoyed.. Neville

[¿]

That is so kind and generous of you dear Neville...I didn't know that this piece would take a shape until I'd written the seventh line..I guess this shape can be imagined in any way a reader wants to...and I'm honoured by your valuable words certainly....Cartload of thanks for reading this....Be blessed :)

[Neville]

Wow.. that's a lot of thanks heaped on me my very fine literary friend.. I am indeed blessed & true :)

[Misterr Remeat]

Very well written. I walked up to that edge in my youth and managed to turn back before going off. Lots of people I knew and grew up with did not. Your words reminded me of how close i was to it. Thanks!

[¿]

Tis a very pleasant era to die slowly but surely.....but your return must've bloomed many smiles on your well wishers faces I believe....
Thanks so much and more for reading and sharing your valuable words with us dear Remeat...Almighty's grace be upon you and your people, ameen :)

[Robert Trakofler]

Wow Z this is so sad and so true, I have lost more people than I care to say to drug use. I have never been able to write my feelings on the subject yet. I usually just feel to upset to let it flow. But you did a fine job of it in this write.

[¿]

Bunny my friend! Many many thanks for reading also for your valuable words upon this piece....
I can indeed sense your lost and all I can say is.....Have faith in the Almighty.....May his grace be upon you🌸

[Anjeline]

Very nice poem. It is conveying a strong message which is much needed by the people to understand today.

[¿]

Thanks so much dear Anjeline for understanding my message...Stay safe and Be blessed💖

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Sjoeee- self love is needed here- not harm- i understand how tough life can be but you are tougher i truly hope u find your peace and come to see that we need to nurture iurselves and not allow the world to dictate our emotions and actions- all is possibke when we see the light at end tunnel- very emotional right- pray all is well🌹

[Abhishek Izy]

Wonderfully crafted, subtle yet thought provoking imagery and such a fantastic choice of words. There's a sync and sense to everything you wrote. This is a remarkable piece of art

[¿]

You're inspiring and I thank you for being that...also for giving this piece a visit...Thanks a lot Abhishek :)

[Abhishek Izy]

Pleasure was all mine, dear friend!