Pleasing Poison

Pleasing Poison

A Poem by Tahsin.Z🍁
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Furling a piece of foil
into a hollow little roll
he puffs pleasing poison;
sleeps isolated from realism
There are pipe dreams in his eyes,
brightens when twilight disappears
His comatose brain films radiant reveries
at night, within his mind’s stilled senses
Ordeals of failure constrained him to shut
the shop of sterling virtues residing in his heart
Switched it to exhibition of aggressive notions;
inaugurated bad blood between him and life
When he finds no pleasing poison,
lacerating arms calms him down
Thirst and hunger abandoned
He’s a spectacular skeleton
in loneliness’s grave
  sans elation

© 2018 Tahsin.Z🍁


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Very nice poem. It is conveying a strong message which is much needed by the people to understand today.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Tahsin.Z🍁

1 Year Ago

Thanks so much dear Anjeline for understanding my message...Stay safe and Be blessed💖
Sjoeee- self love is needed here- not harm- i understand how tough life can be but you are tougher i truly hope u find your peace and come to see that we need to nurture iurselves and not allow the world to dictate our emotions and actions- all is possibke when we see the light at end tunnel- very emotional right- pray all is well🌹

Posted 1 Year Ago


Wonderfully crafted, subtle yet thought provoking imagery and such a fantastic choice of words. There's a sync and sense to everything you wrote. This is a remarkable piece of art

Posted 1 Year Ago


Tahsin.Z🍁

1 Year Ago

You're inspiring and I thank you for being that...also for giving this piece a visit...Thanks a lot .. read more
Abhishek Izy

1 Year Ago

Pleasure was all mine, dear friend!
Your words evoke strong images of the pain and turmoil of drug addiction. You also captured the sad surrender of emotions and reality. The dreams of peace and tranquility quickly turn to nightmares. Strong writing, well done.
Peace,
Richie b.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Tahsin.Z🍁

1 Year Ago

I found that your words have made me elated....Thanks very much dear friend....Be blessed :)
Drug addiction, such a curse. People experiment thinking that they won't be lured into its relentless grip. Before they know it, they are sucked in to the vortex. Your lines dear Tahsin remind me of those I have known who took that pathway and paid for it with their lives. Powerful reminder.

Chris

Posted 1 Year Ago


Tahsin.Z🍁

1 Year Ago

Even I'm known to some people who've been through such devastation....Had to scribble something upon.. read more
Christine Anne Shaw

1 Year Ago

Thank you dear one, and I wish all the best for you too.

Chris
This is the frightening truth about addiction.. It starts as a "curiosity", experiment that appears to be pleasurable, then it's insidious grip becomes a fear of living in a real world. By then the destruction begins.
The physical "shape" of your poem also illustrates visually the rise and decline of the perceived elation of the "high" to the final mental destruction.
A perceptive and visually graphic pen picture of this scourge, Tahsin.
I agree with Dr YumnaKay. that full stops will emphasise and heighten the impact of these changing images. But otherwise, an excellent piece of writing .
Norman

Posted 1 Year Ago


Tahsin.Z🍁

1 Year Ago

It's an honour for me to hear your encouraging words on my writing....am so elated that you liked it.. read more
This is all the more relevant as OD's pile up to the sound of eulogies.
Some start as innocent painkillers, wrongfully prescribed but however, the statistics are alarming and steadily climbing
You have done an effective portrayal
Dave

Posted 1 Year Ago


Tahsin.Z🍁

1 Year Ago

Many thanks dear Dave for reading this....you said the bitter truth which i can never deny...Be bles.. read more
The way you draw this poem, it tells your creativity. "Artists sometimes seem so everyday in their talk and demeanor that we understood them like all others. Only when we are left to witness their creativity then we know their fortitude and pedestal they live in." The structure of the poem is an example of Altar poems, it feels so good witnessing your creativity and hard work.
Coming to the poem, you have supplied it with tiny details with images, and your own style. It feels like you have a close encounter with this situation:) nicely done.
keep shining!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Tahsin.Z🍁

1 Year Ago

Well that's the main advantage in being closer to a situation which we can paint with the tiniest an.. read more
I like the subject matter and your structure as well, was it intentional or a spur in the moment thingy? Just curious ;)
I love your last lines; that ending nicely captures the struggles of an alcoholic.
The small, itchy (bitchy:P) part in me would have loved this write more if you'd added punctuations but oh, I did enjoy reading it very much. :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


Tahsin.Z🍁

1 Year Ago

The second one😀
I'll try punctuating this....thanks so much Yumna for your visit here and .. read more
Not only the theme is well-chosen and the words are well-balanced but the structure is also creative. Thanks for sharing!!!!!!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Tahsin.Z🍁

1 Year Ago

Thanks Lovely!!😀

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