The reality of life

The reality of life

A Story by Talal Hussain
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Well this is my first writing..this article is based on the reality of life.after seeing the youth being mislead i thought it was important to refresh their soul and guide them towards a content life

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                           The Reality of Life


As a child is born he is innocent and angelic. He repeats what you say and follows what you do. His sweet little acts are a source of joy for the whole family. This is undoubtedly the most cheerful stage of life. As he grows up he learns a lot of things, while most of them are productive others aren’t. He is shown a lot of paths in front of him and has to decide which one to follow. He follows one, then another and quickly realizes that his life is not going in the right direction. This is not what he always wanted to do. He gets depressed and hopeless. He spends most of his life in this misery. Things get very tough for him. He doesn’t know where to go, who to look up to. It is only when he gets old that he realizes the true meaning of life. Perhaps it was the innocence, the purity that was missing throughout his adulthood. He indulged into things which were materialistic, virtual and unrighteous. This is the reason why one goes back into his childhood as he gets old. But by that time it is too late. If only he could go back in time and undo his wrong deeds. Thus it is necessary that we start giving importance to the basic principles of life and stay away from the worldly desires so that we won’t have to contrite for our deeds when we get old and feeble.

© 2012 Talal Hussain


Author's Note

Talal Hussain
Please ignore any grammar mistakes. The Target of this article is the youth,it would be highly appreciable if you rate and review this article and also let me know of the shortcomings as it is my first writing.

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Hi Talal, I think you are a natural, you write brilliantly and I could not detect any grammatical errors. Keep writing, this is a solid effort, I thoroughly engaged with your perceptions of this young boy's development and your philosophical stance was mature and enhanced the piece greatly, Well done.

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Talal Hussain

7 Years Ago

thank you so much mam...honored you liked it :-)



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I'll be another voice in the crowd saying this was a great write. I enjoyed reading it, no paragraphs or spacing, just straight forward life. Nice job!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Talal Hussain

7 Years Ago

thank you :-)
"Perhaps it was the innocence, the purity that was missing throughout his adulthood. He indulged into things which were materialistic, virtual and unrighteous. ... If only he could go back in time and undo his wrong deeds. "

You have written the gist of all wisdom that mankind has discovered, forgotten , and rediscovered, time and again... I believe in the same, and could relate to every sentence of your write!

Keep writing! :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Very deep, I loved the meaning behind it all. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


When you start describing how things get tough for the individual, I wish you would concentrate of specific obstacles. Just to give some ground, or stability to the short story.


"while most of them are productive others aren’t." I think it flows better if you say "are not" instead of "aren't"

It's a wonderful piece, though.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Well I liked the originality of it. I too, often dwell on these things...I wonder about how life would be if things weren't this way. If I'd chosen the other path. If I'd live on other moral values. If I weren't me.
I especially loved the lines: "He repeats what you say and follows what you do. His sweet little acts are a source of joy for the whole family. This is undoubtedly the most cheerful stage of life." Reminds me of how pure we all start out to be and then how polluted and burnt we become of sin and misdeed and this and that. Life's tough but so are we :]

Posted 7 Years Ago


Talal Hussain

7 Years Ago

thank you so much..glad you could relate :-)
A pleasant read. However the underlying message behind it was perhaps a bit over simplified? The meanings behind this passage definitely could have been slightly more layered and instead of giving the reader the conclusion, maybe you could have allowed the reader to draw the conclusion for himself? Just a few comments but nonetheless, nice work!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Talal Hussain

7 Years Ago

thanks for your suggestions..i will keep them in mind for my next writing :-)
Wow, this is so true... Beautifully said. :) And no grammatical errors that I could detect. It's really great, good job! And keep it up! :D

Posted 7 Years Ago


Talal Hussain

7 Years Ago

thank you so much...really appreciate your comments :-)
Admiral Kirk

7 Years Ago

You're very welcome. :)
This is very insightful and presents a view that not many people are able or willing to see. These are very wise and well written words!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Talal Hussain

7 Years Ago

thank you so much :-)
Alexa Tasch

7 Years Ago

you're welcome! I'm sorry it took me so long to read this!
brilliantly written, very descriptive in the imagery you portrayed here regarding how when one gets older they tend to look back towards their childhood, with the "what if, if only i could, etc" - eloquently profound, very well penned. thanks for sharing :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Talal Hussain

7 Years Ago

thank you...i am glad you could relate :-)
ms. barrie

7 Years Ago

you welcome, very much so :)
I like your insight. This is a deep and meaningful piece I am guessing you wrote while in an emotional journey. Nice work!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Talal Hussain

7 Years Ago

Thanks..yes i did :-)

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Talal Hussain
Talal Hussain

Karachi, Sindh, Pakistan



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I am a 22 yr old medical student..though not a traditional writer, I write what i feel with words coming from my heart...i think if words are given the right path they can penetrate deeper than sword... more..

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