I Promise..

Don't you understand,
I'm always here for you?
Don't you understand,
I care about you too?

I know you feel alone,
You think no one cares,
But truth is I really do,
And I promised to be there.

Anytime you need to,
Know you can talk to me,
I'll always love you for you,
You'll always be my eternity.

Through better or worse,
'Til death does us part,
I promise to you love,
You'll always be my heart..

So please talk to me,
I may not fully get it,
But I promise to listen,
That's enough, isn't it?

Please don't ignore me,
Run away and hide,
Pretend you don't hear me,
Or keep your feelings all inside..

Vent your feelings to me,
Whatever it takes,
Just don't keep hurting,
Or I'll too have heartbreak...

Reviews

[Phillitup]

This is really good although I found a few things I would like to discuss. First off, you pulled off a rhyming poem well but there are a few flow issues. I'll tell them to you so you don't have to search if you choose to fix them. Third stanza, fourth line. I think you should take out always. Fourth stanza, second line. I think you should say do instead of does. Fourth stanza, fourth lines. Same, always. Sixth stanza, fourth line. I think you should take out all. Don;t change them because I say so. Read it through like that and then decide. I think it would help the flow but you can keep it the way it is if you really want to. Again, just my opinion. Nicely and eloquently penned my poetic friend!
Best regards,
Dell

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thanks for the suggestions, I'll read through it.

[Brittany Zedalis]

And yet another wonderful poem:)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you, I'm really glad that you enjoy my poetry (:

[Courtney]

I like how it flow from one line to another. It also rhymes well. Well written indeed.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you so much (:

[Moon]

I can related to this . When your loved one pushes you away , the pain is tremendous .

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Yes. It really is! Thank you (:

[Moon]

You are welcome

[Patrick Henry]

I like your poem. I don't understand all the commas, though. I think if that first stanza was repeated after the 7th one, it'd be a nice ending come full-circle kind of poem!! Nice job with it. -Mark

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you for the idea! And for taking the time to review (:

[Ravyne Hawke]

good rhythm and rhyme to this piece, pure raw emotions.. a very telling poem.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you(:

[Maila]

I am currently going through what you just described!

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Oh okay, I'm so glad that you could relate (:

[Lover Of Words]

Great flow greatly done love it

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you! (:

[Lover Of Words]

No problem :)

[C.C. Marx]

It great when someone can be there for you in your time of need..I hope he appreciates you for that! :) nice work

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Awwww, thank you, he does, at least, it seems like it :P hahaha, but thanks(:

[C.C. Marx]

Your very welcome good luck :)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thanks(: good luck to you too, in finding someone who treats you as well as you deserve!(:

[C.C. Marx]

Aww thx Amanda :)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

It's no problem(:

[BMarcel85]

Wow, very nice. even though it doesn't rhyme, it surely has great rhythm...I like how you decided to separate the verse, it works for me. Gr8 job!

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it!