Upside Down People

Upside Down People

A Poem by Taliaa Delune
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A short poem that makes little sense of nothing. Please comment and I will return the favor!

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Paint a memory of dotted lines

Hear the faces

See the voices

Memorize the taste of its touch

And the scent of its sound


Create a landscape of parallel lines

Broken every quarter inch

Leading to a backwards place

Of upside down people

With sideways dreams


© 2013 Taliaa Delune


Author's Note

Taliaa Delune
It's just a short little thing that I decided to be my first post on writerscafe! Please leave a comment and tell me what you think- I will of course return the favor and look through the work of those who have made comments. Thanks again! :)

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Cool! looks like you are not a rookie nice touch :) keep writing!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Interesting poem.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Dear Taliaa

Welcome to Writers Café

I have nothing to do with the administration of the site.

I just review and write on here like everyone else.

However I take a keen interest in new members and how they express themselves; what they are trying to say; and how they do it.

There is style and mystery to this poem.

I enjoy both.

Style: It has balance and metre.

Content? Well you leave me thinking.

I have my own take as others will have theirs.

I feel you talk about the art of writing and how to make sense of it in playing with words on a page, seeing what they look like and finding yourself somewhere between throwing them in the bin and working on them,

Advice?

1) This is an accomplished piece. Keep writing; and

2) Never bin anything you write. If you don't like it, stick it in a bottom drawer and you may even come back to it later. Everything we write is raw material. We are all alchemists as writers, doing our best to turn the mud of life into gold.

I am glad you have joined.

Stay. I look forward to reading more.

You are most welcome

James

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 4 people found this review constructive.

Taliaa Delune

7 Years Ago

Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read my poem and offer advices. Again, than.. read more

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Added on March 20, 2013
Last Updated on March 20, 2013
Tags: backwards, upside down, people, paint, memories, sound, taste, touch, sight scent, senses, creation

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Taliaa Delune
Taliaa Delune

Canada



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Well I guess it's safe to say you already know my name is Taliaa... I write because no one can stop me and I paint when I need to put life on a time out. My sketches are rough and my poetry raw, bu.. more..


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