The Four Seasons

The Four Seasons

A Poem by WhatTact
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I suppose I was bored, and you have to have a first post. Summer and Winter have been re-written (Summer was too focused on humans, and winter turned into a story, which I didn't really want it to be)

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White earth, reflecting the moonlight
Ignited in a white fire, cold as death
Nothing quite compares to breathing ice.
To look up as your breath becomes a cloud
Expected numbness overakes you, as you stand in the frozen world
Reddened face looks up to the snow-polished moon, as numbed toes take you home.



Soft grasses peek up from underneath ice as it melts away
Petals, small and delicate start to bud from once-bare twigs
Rain, too, brings new life from the once-frozen land
I often wonder, if this earth is like the opposite of the Pheonix
New again, after every frozen cycle.
Generating new life, from cold death.



Swealtering under the sun, life flourishes
Useful fruits, are bought and sold
Many plants, reach their peak and then slowly wither in the heat
Mason jars are used to preserve seasonal-freshness until cold months
Everything is as vivid and colorful as you could imagine
Ready to be plucked and eaten, like the fat tomato on the vine.



Freshly fallen leaves crunch under bootsoles
All the land is colored in reds and golds, and deep evergreens
Leaves, meant to be the new decay, become insulation for the coming months.
Living things, using death, to survive until the new year.


© 2010 WhatTact


Author's Note

WhatTact
What do you think of the idea? Should I have used "Attumn" instead of "Fall?."
Ugh, I still don't like summer. What can I do to fix it?

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I quite like this ^.^ you use some wonderful metaphors- 'snow-polished moon', and 'living things, using death, to survive until the new year'- very original.
There is a noticeable difference between summer and the other seasons, though. The others are more general in describing the outdoors, whereas you've narrowed the focus significantly to humans, and the effect of the weather.
I only noticed one minor error in spring- 'bear' should be 'bare'.
Overall it's a good write, (and I like how you used the colours to represent each season) : D

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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@munkiC munkiDU:
I see what you're saying (and yeah, Summer should be changed). Pff, no the twigs really were once bears. What are you talking about? (yes I will edit that) :P Thanks very much.

Posted 11 Years Ago


I quite like this ^.^ you use some wonderful metaphors- 'snow-polished moon', and 'living things, using death, to survive until the new year'- very original.
There is a noticeable difference between summer and the other seasons, though. The others are more general in describing the outdoors, whereas you've narrowed the focus significantly to humans, and the effect of the weather.
I only noticed one minor error in spring- 'bear' should be 'bare'.
Overall it's a good write, (and I like how you used the colours to represent each season) : D

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Tags: Winter, Summer, Spring, Fall, Seasons, Acrostic

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