Sensitive

When I hear your music
I feel soft sand Sand
Like powder
or dust
Miles of beige stretch
Speckles of Blue
From broken shells
Like a robin's egg

When I feel your words
I smell mother Earth
Sweet air like jasmines
Mighty as newly turned ground
Clean and Cool
Like a waterfall
Or a lovers tears
Renewing as a breeze

When I smell your skin
I see you are here
Trustworthy as the sun
As modest as the moon
Secure like an oak
Strong as waves
Washing away solitude
Safe from disaster

When I see us together
I taste your lips
Intoxicating as vintage wine
Divine as nectar
Holy as ambrosia
Like life's purpose, fulfilled
Necessary as water
or blood

When I taste your kiss,
Reality's washed away.
I live in a dream,
A fool's paradise
We are soulmate's.
Together!
I can see our destiny
as certain as Death.

Reviews

[Buddhistboy73]

Ok, so this is longer than the last one, but I think it is infinitely better. You are really great at evoking images in the reader's mind. I love the way you start each stanza with "When I...." and go on to open the reader's imagination and connection with your words......
Well written, good flow, and I particularly liked the 4th stanza....
Again, I saw a few small typos, but I imagine a quick scan would fix them....