Written

A newer thing I am doing... not depressing poetry!!!

An Empty space, can it fill?

With help of words somehow it will.

Blankness parting with every mark,

while the pages start turning more dark

Internal spirits taking a part

faster than his bullseye dart

yet slower than a healing heart

Listen close, and feel it start.

Inspiration lives inside

let it now, no longer hide

bring it forth and feel it thrive

take a breath you're still alive!

Be calm.

Be still.

Not much more to fill.

One day I woke up and I felt it you see.

Whether 2H or a simple HB

you can help your release

you can set yourself free

become who you are

and find your To Be

with your blank space

and your filler

you'll see.

Author's Note

This is one of my more inspirational poems, this is something that I recently started writing, I hope you enjoyed!

Reviews

[Najam Us Saher]

The rhyme scheme is good. I liked the way you presented this poem, the way you asked a question and answered it and ended the poem with a conclusion.

[Taz]

Thank you!

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome.

[Shasha]

Another great poem from you Taz! I loved the way you expressed your thoughts.
Keep it up!

[wordman]

lovely and touching write taz

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the strength and the hope in the words. Life showed us we can overcome anything. Thank you Taz for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

with your blank space
and your filler
you'll see.

Amazing lines. Yes the blank spaces can really be filled one day. Nice poetry...

[emipoemi]

A strong theme with equally strong imagery. You have a few typos ("turning", "inspiration") and "his [bullseye dart]" doesn't quite have a clear antecedent to be able to tell who or what you're referring to ("a" would be a better word to use here). But the main part to work on is musicality. It gets choppy at times, but your modulations (which is an advisable thing to do in a poem to avoid monotony) are carried out stupendously. It's just some lines need a bit of tweaking so the musicality can carry over more fluidly (example: "internal spirits take a part" or "taking part"; "as the pages turn more dark" or "as the pages start turning dark".....both make sense, and help the musicality flow). Well done overall!!

[barleygirl]

I can't remember whether your poetry has been overly dark, but there is much sad depressed poetry on this website, so I'm glad to see you trying something inspirational = SUCCESS! This is a great poem with strong rhyming & good imagination. I don't understand what "2H" and "HB" stand for -- maybe something in the author's notes might be good!?!? Keep experimenting, becuz you're good at it! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Taz]

A 2H and an HB are types of pencils. Thank you for the review, I am happy to know that this poem was enoyed.