Dying Nature

About the destruction of nature and the after effects

Who’s to blame for natures hurts,

when everyday there are a million births,

each one will need a roof to stay,

a job to pay and food every day.

 

grass will have to turn to hay,

even if it means destroying nature day after day.

 

But a time will come when she will strike,

turning the day into night,

the earth will shake and our souls will quiver,

the waves will lash and our eyes will tear,

the parched lands will crack our civility,

and the fires will burn all our hopes to ashes.

 

And I dread that day,just hope it doesn’t turn out this way,

So let’s brush up our act and help her (nature) stay.

Terence S

Reviews

[GreenShoes]

All of your poems are enjoyable to read, but they need some work. Here, I find the last two lines in the first stanza are stay and day, then the next stanza is hay and day, then the last stanza is way and stay, while the entire third stanza has no rhyme at all. Also, putting the word nature in parentheses to explain what you mean by "her" isn't great.

[Terence Sheque]

Thanks for your feedback.
I realize I need to work a lot on rhymes.
But I have a question.....sound stupid, but does poetry always need to rhyme.......

[GreenShoes]

Absolutely not, but when you do rhyme, do it well.