Virtual Friends

About virtual (online) friendship

I wish you mornings, I wish you nights,

A friendship forged over the miles,

I met you as a stranger and took you as a friend,

Just hope, this friendship will never end.

 

Miles apart and yet so close,

We talk are hearts, and sooth our pains,

Share our dreams, and all our banes.

 

Sometimes naughty and sometimes nice,

Our talks are always full of spice,

And time doesn’t matter, if its day or night,

I only hope we stay this tight.

 

And till our paths will cross someday,

Over the miles and over the days,

I pray, this bond (friendship) will bloom to stay.

Terence S

Reviews

[GreenShoes]

Very nice sentiments. I'm sure your friend appreciates this poem. Now, about the rhyme scheme, your first stanza is ABCC, the second stanza is DEE, the third stanza is FFGG, and the fourth stanza is HIH. If you're going to have the rhymes someday/stay in a stanza, I would not use the word 'days' to end the other line.

If you go to www.shadowpoetry.com, you will see all kinds of poetry forms, some are easy, and some are very difficult. You will learn about rhyme, meter, and many other poetry techniques. It's a good start for anyone excited about writing poetry but needs help with the fundamentals. Oh, and by the way, short poem does not mean easy poem. Just saying. :)

[Terence Sheque]

Hey, thanks again.
I will check out the site.
Thanks for sharing your knowledge and views.
Really need this........I really need to work on a lot of stuff, especially technique......
Thanks once again for your guidance. Appreciate it.

[Gee]

Hi, the lack of a rhyme scheme makes this a very disjointed read. Folk seem to think penning rhyming verse is child's play but that is not the case.

[Terence Sheque]

Hey, thanks for the feedback.
I'm definitely going to be working on the rhymes.......