Angels Over Water

Little embarrassed to say I wrote this in like 15 mins and didn't redraft it so it could perhaps be a lot better but I like it anyway and will probably edit at a later date.

The valleys lie low in the winter
as did those fields of Athenry before.
Low like my heart sinks when I miss her.
Sinks like the sunset gone shore.
Islands float solemn to aberrations
as does my compunction this night.
Float like great fleets between nations.
Fleets defeated idly out of sight.
Our lips peeled apart in great heat
as did our tongues hold on.
Peeled apart like skin and sodden breech.
Sodden like every love song.

My fingers move swiftly on the keys
as did they once to her skin.
Swiftly like typical northern breeze.
Typical like the discord I’m in.
My mind burns under the midnight sun
as I said it did in ‘The Desert’.
Burning like fires amazed and stunned.
Amazed unlike I when I hurt.
Closure creeps in with the haunters
as they did so many nights ago.
Creeping like angels over water.
Angels who once kissed me slow.

Reviews

[Kaylor Mason]

Very exquisite imagery. I really like the ambiguity of this--the way so many different interpretations and perceptions could be right here give it depth that provides the mind with endless hours of contemplation

[TheJordBaker]

thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it and honored it has an effect :)

[Bluefire]

Very good, I like it.

[TheJordBaker]

thanks

[Bluefire]

No problem.

[afra]

wow ...i think this was one if your best .....i love it ....well done

[TheJordBaker]

thank you :)