World of Dream

probably the closest thing to an up-lifting poem I've ever written

As the winter world flows harsh upstream
we lie here together in this world of dream
wrapped up warm in this soft veneer
and yet somehow I still miss you, dear.

Life a delicate balance of consonant charm
to paint me a portrait of these merited storms,
pictures of skylines and sensual stars.
We’ll sign it ‘how wonderful you are’.

You’ll cry for me because my words are pure,
they make me esoteric and insecure.
You take my talent and take my flaws,
hold my hand in this world of dream,
weigh up all the hurt I bring
and you’ll still miss me, dear. 

Reviews

[Mia]

"You’ll cry for me because my words are pure,
they make me esoteric and insecure.
You take my talent and take my flaws,
hold my hand in this world of dream,"
This is beautiful! I enjoyed it very much. Especially the lines i quoted. Haha this is the closest you've come to up-lifting...lol. Negative emotions are so much more consuming and leave more of an impact. It’s easier to write about the pain than the pleasure for most. To be perfectly honest, I enjoy depressing, dark and twisty poetry more than happy-go-lucky poetry. They just seem more honest and emotional.

[TheJordBaker]

thank you so much :) I agree with you, they become more personal and emotional, and flow more since you're writing from the heart.

[Mia]

You're very welcome :)

[Bluefire]

Very beautiful, thank you for sharing this wonderful piece of art :3

[TheJordBaker]

thank you very much, glad you liked it :)

[Bluefire]

No problem. ^^

[Brandon Mathis]

i like this one a lot one of my favs from u

[TheJordBaker]

thank you!!

[Cerise]

Awww..that was soo sweet and nice..very nicely linked over all..:)

[TheJordBaker]

thanks very much :)