A Dip Inside Your Mind

A Dip Inside Your Mind

You disgust me with your intricacy
When you let me on the inside
You trust me
What a fool you are!
Oh such details you tell me...

A blackened heart
That's darker than charcoal
More viscous than tar
One that you possess
It's polluting my mind

It's something that you want to share
It's a piece of your heart
It's your black diamond
Sparkling in the night

If I accept then shall we rule?
Is that what you want?
To make me your queen?
You'll embrace me with your gray clouds
And send lightning down to protect me

I'll sew my gowns from punished souls
Their screams are there to lull me
I'll tie my hair with veins not ribbons
The dripping blood shall bathe me

If I was to be your queen
Then this would be the life I'd lead
The nobles of the underworld we'd be

Such shiversome thoughts you share with me
They drive me to insanity
The moon becomes a sun to me
And the sky pushes me down

Little girls they don't play with fire
Rebellion drives us to it
And once my pumping heart will burn
Black diamonds will cover the sky

You disgust me with your intricacy
The details that you share with me
Of all of your dark fantasies
Swirling in my mind...

Hell-o Hades!

Reviews

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Hmm, I found this consuming me in! Every word dragging me deeper and deeper into something my soul and mind are linked to. :) Only to be shaken and turned back to fantasy-reality :) Can't tell you how much joy this brought me. :) A link to the past I pushed aside. Aside from the Depth of this compulsion poem I really think you did a Superb Job by writing this. And the form railed me in narrowing my mind not to get lost inside, Instead leading me, guiding me through A fantastic world of wonder :) A well well Done Poetess!! Now all you need is a picture :) Hehe Thanks for sharing!!

[Blue Ivory]

Oh right I don't have a picture! I couldn't find one demented enough I guess :P If you ever come across something, link me?

[Blue Ivory]

Oh, and glad you liked it :)

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Hehe okay :)

[Blue Ivory]

This is very nicely written, I always find it wonderful to read well written dark scriptures, especially at this level. This let you see very well, which is a duality and what it can do, but also recognize the points that the reader sees through your words, and wondering whether you compete against yourself (as principal) or that it is about another's, very interesting . Well done!

E.L.

[Blue Ivory]

I'm glad you saw all of that :) Thank you!

[Emma Ruth]

"I'll sew my gowns from punished souls" - Love that line :) Very well written, I loved the words you use - beautifully dark...

[Blue Ivory]

Thanks a lot! :D

[UnderCompulsion]

This is amazing!Really!Great choice of words and I found it truly beautiful.It goes to my favorites! :)

[Blue Ivory]

Thanks a lot!

[UnderCompulsion]

:)

[MOON]

Wow II , what a way to describe your feeling eloquent and yet you make a point of showing how distateful all this is , like being dragged down to a level thats repugnant. This is such a striking satanza I'll sew my gowns from punished souls
Their screams are there to lull me
I'll tie my hair with veins not ribbons
The dripping blood shall bathe me

[Blue Ivory]

Thanks! Really! :D

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Damn girl you goon with your bad self... hate breeds hate and even the best people can get caught up in negativity when influenced by the right person... I love the stand you take against such evil.

[Blue Ivory]

Thank you! :3

[Mark]

"the moon becomes a sun to me, and the sky pushes me down." Away from the light I assume. I see a confusion in this write between attraction and disgust with attraction seeming to win, yet the first stanza talks about how much a fool he is for trusting... perhaps in 'polluting' her mind his mind becomes something else? Lots of thought provoking lines in this poem! I loved it. :)

[Blue Ivory]

Actually, you can infer it any way you like but what I meant was that these are the thoughts that he shares with me. About the gowns and ribbons, that is. And the part about the sun is how his thoughts are effecting me by making me sway towards the darkness. But then again, I'm back to my disgust, calling him a psychopath :)

[Mark]

It's an addiction. Addictions are not rational, and we are never able to deal with them by ourselves.

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Wow!

[Blue Ivory]

Best review ever! :D lol