Book One: the Beacon and the Harbinger
A Book by TheLastEclipse
 Book one from the Chronicles of the Almative order follows the lives of Vesavius Nepler and Primine Terros, men seperated by hundreds of years.  © 2014 TheLastEclipse
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Give any input as well as opinion. Feel free to discuss character development and etc.
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Its good but a little too medieval for my taste. So far your writing is the most gripping as you don't give away too much info at the beginning however, I was a little confused when I started chapter one. the characters are different people to the prologue.
Usually when I write a prologue I have the same main character start the first chapter too. Who is your protagonist? I'm not sure.
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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9 Years Ago
The way the chapters cycle is Prologue is medieval and the Chapter One is present. The characters cy.. read moreThe way the chapters cycle is Prologue is medieval and the Chapter One is present. The characters cycle every chapter. There is not sincerely one protagonist. Once the novel is pursued, you will understand.
The two protagonists practically have nothing related personally, but... they both have a similar importance.
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9 Years Ago
oh, ok. It is a little complicated because (If i can remember right) both the prologue and first cha.. read moreoh, ok. It is a little complicated because (If i can remember right) both the prologue and first chapter started in some sort of conflict or fight. They were so similar that I found myself looking back to see if I had missed something or forgotten some detail.
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Its good but a little too medieval for my taste. So far your writing is the most gripping as you don't give away too much info at the beginning however, I was a little confused when I started chapter one. the characters are different people to the prologue.
Usually when I write a prologue I have the same main character start the first chapter too. Who is your protagonist? I'm not sure.
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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9 Years Ago
The way the chapters cycle is Prologue is medieval and the Chapter One is present. The characters cy.. read moreThe way the chapters cycle is Prologue is medieval and the Chapter One is present. The characters cycle every chapter. There is not sincerely one protagonist. Once the novel is pursued, you will understand.
The two protagonists practically have nothing related personally, but... they both have a similar importance.
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9 Years Ago
oh, ok. It is a little complicated because (If i can remember right) both the prologue and first cha.. read moreoh, ok. It is a little complicated because (If i can remember right) both the prologue and first chapter started in some sort of conflict or fight. They were so similar that I found myself looking back to see if I had missed something or forgotten some detail.
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Added on August 4, 2014
Last Updated on August 4, 2014
Tags: Magic, Fantasy, Drama
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