And So I Watched You From Afar

And So I Watched You From Afar

A Poem by Bradley

I was listening to a band by the same name when I wrote this.


You are surrounded by two way mirrors

Your reflections reach infinity

Every image moves and breathes with you

As the world looks in wanting and needing

Make peace with the unnumbered


Before counting the numbered

© 2013 Bradley

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Interesting metaphor. As a general note, I love your work. It's so real, your metaphors make me really look for the meaning and are beautiful. Reminds me of the traditional poets. Ok onto this particular piece.
You set up a great picture, we the reader, are looking at the many versions of ourselves. Not just the physical many versions but the many personalities which we have. The image of the world looking it is perfect! Every one needing a little bit of you, maybe for work maybe to solve one of their problems. Everyone wants you to be in their life and such. Your last lines confuse me a little, what do you mean by the numbered and unnumbered. Please explain :)

My only critique is to remember punctuation again. Read it out loud find where you want the reader to pause.
Overall I love this piece, so complex and beautiful. Great Job :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


11 Years Ago

The unnumbered is, as you have pointed out, you and everything about you. Any strength, any flaw wil.. read more

11 Years Ago

Ah! I read this aloud to my family and we thought that you were talking about maybe the unnumbered a.. read more
this is top shelf work, i look forward to reading more of you

Posted 11 Years Ago

Emily B

11 Years Ago

why wouldn't you expect praise for writing like this?

11 Years Ago

Well, first of all, I only recently started writing and even more recently started putting it out th.. read more
Emily B

11 Years Ago

based on this, I would suggest that you expect praise more often :)

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Added on April 17, 2013
Last Updated on September 18, 2013




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