slay the debutante

behind the punch bowls and refreshments

we throw our own party to entertain ourselves;

people like us, street farmers, dirty hands, dirty minds,

dress pretty but even-so awkward as hell.

 

'til some over-friendly debutante

with words so sticky sickly sweet,

comes a'traipsing across the carpet

because we're two she'd like to meet,

 

but my girl ain't up for puffed up fluff

she cups her glass and eyes at me

i was raised well enough, she smiles, she trusts,

and i politely stand to greet.

 

her wit always trumps their social interludes

when they try to condescend

making little of their poignant attitudes

so clever i can't hide a grin.

 

our host, her mouth is stuck wide open

in shock by what my love has said

"it was a pleasure for us to meet ", i smiling,

"but i feel the need to dance."

 

her satin gloves take their appointed stance

as our shoes click towards the floor

"thank you for rescuing me", she concedes,

"i don't think i'd take much more."

 

"oh my love,  your graces never cease to amaze me,

how a mouth so foul can kiss so sweetly."

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

"slay the debutante"
m.s.early,
Honest. I like that! Just truthful in a world of hidden agendas and falsehoods. Here is a situation where forthrightness is honored. A place like this within a party atmosphere...no need to make a false impression.
Blessings,
Kathy

[Rita L. Sev]

A scene, a moment in time, cleverly crafted and with just enough of a bite. I enjoyed this read!

[m.s.early]

(: thank you so much Rita :)

[Lyn Anderson]

A clever and thoughtful piece, with a lovely sardonic wit.

[m.s.early]

(: thank you so much :)

[Chris]

Anger told with a smile - and a have vs not tude and wit. I could mind pic the scene with social-motivated separations. An old time Turner Classic Movie rescripted and brought back to life. Very well done.

[m.s.early]

(: Thank you for your gracious review :)

[Jack...]

Very cool Xavier, I could picture this taking place in my head as I read. Classic little high brow vs. us. Loved it.

[m.s.early]

(: thank you jack :) feel free to visit anytime...

[Coyote Poetry]

A interesting read.
"but my girl ain't up for puffed up fluff
she cups her glass and eyes at me"
I was never a fan of great weddings. I enjoyed how you described situation and action. I like the ending. Some woman are special because they are real. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Frieda P]

A compelling charmer, witty and full of moxy. We do tend to put people in tidy little boxes don't we....your title drew me in, perfect, and killer last line. Enjoyed!

[m.s.early]

Thank you Frieda!

[Frieda P]

For some reason I kept picturing Paris Hilton whilst reading this ;-) My pleasure, I'll be back...

[Yellow Butterfly]

Your lady was just marking her territory... letting this 'Debutante in no uncertain terms' know you were off limits... I like her style...

and loved your poem.... :)

[Omar Fendri]

This poem is factious yet classically elegant. Peerless in its style and delicate in its vocabulary. I like the story and I congratulate your girl. The last stanza is amazing, especially the very last line. You never know what the aesthetically pleasing lips are capable of.
The description here is impeccable:
"people like us, street farmers, dirty hands, dirty minds,
dress pretty but notably awkward as hell." ... So much to express in only two lines.

[m.s.early]

Thank you so much poet. You reveal what I was trying to capture. Too quick we compartmentalize those superficially and get whipped by our own conceit.

[Omar Fendri]

you are welcome. Very true is what you are saying...