quench

in evening beams open windows gape,

silent panes waxing moonbeams thru,

ivory rays from yonder orb induced,

thy silken hairs plunge below thy nape;

 

clustered breasts anointed, gleaning moon,

sparring milky kisses, doves sweetly cooing,

thy scarce richly lips humidly drooping,

dampen stars, thy kiss consumed.

 

thy lover compelled to entrance thy sense

to displace all other helplessness yet subdued

upon convulsing, pillowed, ravished, confused

thou art his aflutter near silenced yet wrenched;

closer still thy nervous thighs seek imbued

'til morning discovers asunder lovers quenched.

Reviews

[DaughterNature]

Wow, that was something! What a sophisticated way to describe such a breathless act. I love the language, the rhyme scheme, and the rhythm, but the use of "thy" is a little off-putting because it sounds forcedly-archaic, and also because it is difficult to know whether the reader is being directly addressed or is observing.

[s y e]

This is beautiful, X - A really, lovely, sophisticated poem...

[Lyn Anderson]

As usual, your sexy, sensual writes are sophisticated and steamy -- beautiful as always.

[m.s.early]

(: As usual your reviews are deeply appreciated KL :)

[Mockingbird]

the lover succeeds in placidly seducing her into letting go of her hesitation and inhibition. he brings out her inherent sensuality. there would be no other way to quell this maelstrom of desire but to get there with one another.

[m.s.early]

(: as usual mockingbird, your comments are uniquely delving, astute, and insightful. often getting there is more critical than the culmination... :)

[Ruth]

This is beautiful...makes me think not only of the moonlight and nature but also the process...the afters, what then? Is it ever enough? Gorgeous work x

[m.s.early]

(: thank Poppy. What then? Catch our breath and drink fluids lol... Is it ever enough... never in the right hands :)

[Ruth]

lol Love it :)

[Rehan Roy]

I like yours use of aesthetic of nature to illustrate the human passions in such an impassioned way.

[m.s.early]

(: thank you Rehan. Nature seems to provide the passion, where we try to capture it in pen :)

[Rita L. Sev]

A classic poem; this is a gentle journey of passion, Xavier. Very nice!

[m.s.early]

(: thank you Rita, gentle and tender was was I was shooting for :)

[Sami Khalil]

I like the classic feel and this the quenching of love or desires aspect...Bravo..................

[m.s.early]

(: thank you Sami. As I approached the end, I was seeking to resolve :)

[Sami Khalil]

OK. You are welcome...:)..................

[Linda alexander]

thy lover compelled to entrance thy sense
to displace all other helplessness yet subdued
upon convulsing, pillowed, ravished, confused
thou art his aflutter near silenced yet wrenched;
closer still thy nervous thighs seek imbued
'til morning discovers asunder lovers quenched.
What a splendid imagination, silky rays of moon, humidity is compared wetness of the kiss, stars are dampened by that and the lover is entering the mind and senses in those magical moments and staying until morning and quite quenched too, marvelous harmony of nature and lover is living fully in you and your senses until morning, enjoyed fully, superb poem

[m.s.early]

(: thank you Linda. Your reviews are always so encouraging :)

[Linda alexander]

I can not write like you, not jealous about it, but can enjoy, review and be a fan of your writing, which I do not consider a lower status too

[m.s.early]

(: Linda, we are indeed peers. There is much to enjoy and learn from everyone :)

[Linda alexander]

Thank you for your kind words, you do not believe, how I came to this site, was searching for a song or something few months back, this site came by mistake or random coincidence, did not know this is a writers group, so really glad I can be middle of all these writers

[m.s.early]

Well our creator often reveals his path when we aren't looking doesn't he? :)

[Linda alexander]

Yes, I believe that, take care

[Vidya Bacchus]

Awesome Xavier is all I can say because your poem speaks for itself :)

[m.s.early]

(: thank you so much vidya :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome :)