Breathtaking

My dearest, here I am planning
a trip down the lane to the sea,
in August as the sun is shining
and you're there to comfort me.
A breathtaking fantasy.

Over the fields we will ramble
picking fruit from God's bramble
soft fruit for jelly & blackberry pie,
oh happy day ~ sing I, sing I,
as my eyes point up to the sky.

We should be well-nourished
with His gift of the purest,
edible berries, and vitamin "C"
giving us strength and vitality,
ever to be in love you see.

My dearest, here I am planning
a breathtaking trip to the sea,
down lover's lane so beguiling,
berries will grow wild and free.
A breathtaking fantasy

Reviews

[Katannaism]

I think the title just says it all. This truly is a breathtaking poem! It's liberating, calm, poetic and absolutely gorgeous. The words just flow in nicely and tucked in. Great write!

[nishantshah2381]

We should be well-nourished
with His gift of the purest,
edible berries, and vitamin "C"
giving us strength and vitality,
ever to be in love you see.

homourus , i liked these words

[TheUnforgivinFallenAnge..]

Thank you

[☯]

So beautiful and simply lovely. I really liked the way you flowed with this poem. The rhymes and words made it so much better. I especially liked the line:
"A breathtaking fantasy" In the intro, and last stanza.
Great job :)

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

so beautiful!

[A.E. Surdam]

:) So very beautiful and romantic. I am such a sucker for romance. This is just so adorable and very, very passionate. It almost seems to me to be a honeymoon between two starry-eyed people in a burst of imagination and creativity. Like flying toward the stars and back down to earth so your toes may sink into the sand. Very romantic once more.

[TheUnforgivinFallenAnge..]

That was lucky you should say, this is an old poem of mine from about a year ago I just found, same with my poem A Touch. She broke up with me bck in October but thank you =)

[DearSweetAgony]

Awwwww!
This poem is soooo sweet!
It reminds me of picnics and love boats and(for some odd reason)
the colors light blue and purple.
I think the end got me the most
"A Breathtaking Fantasy"
Some girl is really lucky!