Nothing but Pain

Not the best poem around but it works.

As I walk down this dark road

The darkness slowly engoulgh me

As the pain slowly destroys me

 

My Fallen Angel cannot heal me

For he is to engoulghed by the darkness

It is all around us

 

You led me to this road

From the road of the heavens

To the road of the Deamons

 

I start to grow my Deamon wings

My horns slowly tear threw my forehead

As my tail burns it way threw my lower back

 

You have created this

For the pain you left

That tore into my heart

 

My Fallen angel also grows a Deamon wing

His horns grow under neath his halo

As his tail slices its way threw his skin

 

Revenge is now are plan

For you love turned us into this

Your love was nothing but pain.....

Reviews

[Katannaism]

I think you should have spelled 'threw' to 'through'. Threw wouldn't make much sense to it. Proofreading and check-ups are strongly advised.
As for the pros of this poem, very raw energy and emotion indeed! Loved the darkness and the tragedy in this write-And the spew of metaphors. It really drew me in with those beautifully sad words. Keep up the good work yeah? :)

[Tasha]

This was really good.

[roy mccarthy]

good write,
raw words!

[TheUnforgivinFallenAnge..]

Yea it is raw huh? Like i said in description not the best around but it works. I did wright this about 4 years ago I think I was in either the 6th or 7th grade

[nishantshah2381]

interesting read .... but it is very raw ................ with time u will try to give it a poetic touch

[TheUnforgivinFallenAnge..]

Yea spelling is not my best thing lol but thank you.

[falling_toxic_rain]

some spelling mistakes, but nothing that can not be fixed...
very deep, in fact good

[A.E. Surdam]

Very interesting.