Falling

The worlds gone black,
i'm going deaf.
All I hear is you screaming my name.
I'm going blind,
All I see is your hand trying to hold me.
My life is gone.

I'm falling,
And deep down inside,
I fell my love for you,
Never got a chance to say that I love you,
Never got a chance to get closer,
And now its over.

I'm falling
Theres no control
I can't save myslef
And I'm falling
down to the death
that I want to forget
I'm far from the love that I want to get
far from the girl whom I loved since we met

Now I'm falling into darkness
The world is going blank
I can't feel anymore
I can't breathe anymore
I'm falling down to my doom,
I feel I've been locked in an empty room,

Far from the love I want to get
Far from the girl I loved since we met
Falling down to the death
I want to forget

Couldn't tell you
Couldn't love you
Didn't want it to end this way
But what could I do?
I can't stay
This is the end, its getting too late

I'm falling
fading away
far from the light
You're out of sight
I hear you scream
and then its over

far, far, far away
from you
Far away from the love that I want to get
Falling down to death
I want to forget.

I can't see anything,
I can't feel anything,
I can't hear anything,
I just want to say I love you
before the end

Reviews

[A.E. Surdam]

So passionate and emotional. Very nice. :)

[Kathryn]

Again, i feel that your poetry reminds me of coffee - sweet and dark, and unbelievably strong. Well written, keep writing :)

[State of Grace]

This sssooo sweet! I just love it! Great job! :)

[~Lizzy♬]

Very sweet, but the poem has a dark side to it. The dark side makes the balance of the poem, which is a beautiful touch. Wonderful write! :p

~Lizzard~

[☯]

Adorable and darkly sweet.

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

Got to love secrets that are carried to the grave...
Not to be morbid, but I like the way you described his death. The opening stanza was gripping and I could imagine being in the man's shoes, experiencing his final moments.

I noticed a couple places where you need to insert apostrophes--in the opening line, "worlds" should be "world's"; all of the "its" should be "it's" (unless I overlooked some that were correct); and in the second stanza, when you say "I fell my love for you," I think you mean "I feel."

[Terra]

good job.

[TheUnforgivinFallenAnge..]

Why thank you =D

[HopelesslyDevoted]

the best poem i have read of yours! excellent read!