The Freedom Days

Shots of electricity straight to the bones. 
Teeth sunk deep in life and 
Never letting go. 
Heart of steel and 
Boundless courage. 

In these days,
The freedom days,
We are all eagles,
Royalty of the sky.
We are all iron stallions,
Tearing though the plains,
Nostrils flared and eyes full of fire,
Making the ground tremble,

Goliath bravery and staring fear 
Hard in the face,
Lips pulled back,
Daring. 

In these days,
The domination days, 
Nothing is fleeting and
We will never die. 

When the smoke is too dense 
For us to see,
Still there is no road behind, 
Only forward.
We will come running,
                                             Rushing,
                            Charging!

Storming the rocky mountain path
Even though the end is beyond our sight. 

These days,
The days of truth, valor, and spirit,
These are the days of heroes.
These are our days,
And we will sooner see ourselves perish
Before the freedom days ever will. 

Author's Note

I want this poem to be powerful. Let me know your thoughts. :)

Reviews

[Matching Socks]

Very moving and powerful.
Nice job my friend.

[Haeshin]

The first one and a half stanzas feel more like quiet determination to me.

[MomzillaNC]

Stirring and powerful. Terrific metaphors for strength and courage.

NOTES: "Tearing [through] the plains,"

[Einstein Noodle]

yes .. lots of powerful metaphors .. i think your free verse lends to the power and flow as well .. it fits ... are you writing mostly about Native Americans? it is also full of tragic sadness ... the creative tension i feel is palpable .. the warrior heart held in check for how long??? kind of like tenuto in music ...hearts that will never give up .. "These are our days" .. love that!!
E.

[Jerome F Knox III pseud..]

As a Vet I have real appreciation for the feel of this piece....


these lines were so spot on

When the smoke is too dense
For us to see,
Still there is no road behind,
Only forward.
We will come running,
Rushing,
Charging!


Amazing metaphor and visual imagery


Goliath bravery and staring fear
Hard in the face,
Lips pulled back,
Daring.

Now I am sitting at the foot of your tree waiting for the next leave to fall

[Valentine]

Yes...it reads power, and it makes one think and wish that people were somewhat like that and just living to make a good life for themselves. Not over running other countries and sending young people to war.
Kathie

[Lizardo]

''Goliath bravery and staring fear ''
Well let me tell you that you made powerful :)
It is a good poem! Very powerful words in it