Morning Came too Soon.

Hmmm its off beat but I like it.

 

Boundaries make me question,

Why in actuality.

Obsessed with the lesson,

Define to me reality.

 

For gaps of light do protest,

I resist, but subdued.

Time is the antagonist.

It’s mindset skewed.

 

My forced conclusion,

To awaken my intelligence.

Day and night’s fusion,

Is a strike on my vigilance.

Author's Note

Do what you must and spare me not.

Reviews

[hey]

This is really pretty. The only problem I have is with the first two line of the second stanza. To me, it seems like the speaker is trying to contradict the "gaps of light", but the verbs "protest" and "resist" are too alike.

Anyways, I really really liked the last stanza. Super pretty.

[Reika]

Ooh, I do like this.
A little off-beat, yes, but not so much that you can tell.
I like how you don't use much words, but it's enough to get the point entirely across.
I love the first stanza, especially, "Obsessed with the lesson, define to me reality"
Very well-written piece. Great read.
=)

[imm's place]

mm spare you not, oh well but i did enjoy the way you use your words and the tale withinnakes one think. excellent, mary