Your Pro v Our Pro !

A short poem about loyalty

1.Your Pro I guess, comes from a foreign soil
Our Pro lives local, doesn't bother with suntan oil
Your Pro is young, fit, the darling of your crowd
Our Pro's getting on, has arthritis, but he's still proud.

2.Your Pro bowls well with vigour and zest
Our Pro just bowls and hopes for the best
And when your Pro bats, the crowds in a trance
Our Pro bats eleven, likes to give the rest a chance.

3. I bet your Pro gets runs and wickets galore
when our Pro last got a wicket, his hamstrung he tore!
And I know your Pro runs, like an Olympic champ
Our Pro can't run fast, cause he goes down with the cramp.

4. But let's look at the 'Pro's and then the Cons', 
in a few years, will your Pro be gone?
Is he like Clint Eastwood, the young hired gun
'For a few dollars more', will he up and run?

5. Not so our Pro. No! He'll never leave
been at his club 50 years, wears his heart on his sleeve, 
Now what price would you pay, for service like that?
Yes he's our Pro and if you meet him, 
please...Tip your hat!

Reviews

[Joyce S. Greene]

I'm definitely pro your Pro can con theirs. If theirs is gone maybe they'll be on the look-out for one like yours. Luckily, yours is loyal so you don't have to worry about him being taken away. :) I really enjoyed reading this, Tom. You've written a great testimonial to a very find man.

[Tom]

Thank you so kindly Joyce, you've definitely picked up the gist of my story !

[Hotwater]

Like it!... play for the shirt.

*bird*

[Tom]

You've got it in one Hotwater bird !

[wordwarrior]

Great poem Tom and such thought provoking words. Too many today are off for the best money and loyalty seems to have gone by the wayside.
You made the contrasts between the tow people very strong.
Your imagery is strong and I really love this!
Write on!

[Tom]

Thank you kindly wordwarrior, I will !

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Cleverly written... I don't know much about the sport, but that does not deter from the nature of the poem. I love the imagery and I think that you are quite witty in your writing, which is so much fun. The concept was great, as it can be put in so many different boxes. Well done, Tom.

[Tom]

Thank you Girl Friday ! Indeed you make a great point !

[Rita L. Sev]

Clever reference to Clint Eastwood - this was entertaining, Tom!

[Tom]

Thank you Rita, I thought you good folk across the pond would like that !

[eatme]

Hickory Dickory Dock...
If you only could mumble sing song it, you can. It is like a 'tune' without the words.

I bet your Pro gets runs and wickets galore
when our Pro last got a wicket, his hamstrung he tore!

by this part, I can't singsong it at all.

Having looked at so many people, I now see it clearly.
They worked their first lines over so many times, that they hacked and chopped it till it flowed.
Then later on, it is not the same flow.

I saw that because this is a great poem and it is all there, but I would like to see it at the next level where it can be poetically sang with the tongue in its rhythm

It might be wickets galore that hurts me

i bet your pro has wickets galore
our pro's last wicket his hamstrung he tore

I don't know. I'm no poet.
It was good enough that I stayed to see it, which in prose, is a great thing, since most people can't get light of day on their words.

[Tom]

Thank you Kleos for an enlightening review, I must check out your work to see if I can be further enlightened ?

[Lydia Shutter]

The references to Clint Eastwood in this one were fantastic! Unfortunately in today's world, it is rare to have players on any team....in any sport....stay put for long. They go to the higher salary and the more desirable venue. A pro who stays fifty years, though? Might be a tad too old to be playing, doncha think? LOL I liked this a lot....good rhyming as always. Lydi**

[Tom]

I agree, but he's still playing & thanks Lydia for a the nice resumee !

[Marie]

I didn't know whaether to laugh or not at this. But I will certainly tip my hat to your Pro if I ever meet him.

[Tom]

Thank you Marie, laugh away, I would feel disappointed if it did not raise a smile or two !

[Tom]

Ps You'd like him !

[Frieda P]

Tipping my hat here! You wrap your pen around loyalty in grand fashion, great read Tom!

Ha, stop picking on Clint...he's a classic too....

[Tom]

'For a few dollars more', would you too up stix Frieda P ? That is the question on my lips ?

[London's Lily]

We don't know much about cricket here in the States, (of course I'm generalizing), but what's extra great about this poem is that it can apply to just about any pro sport. My favourite hockey team held onto some pretty outdated players, as opposed to signing the hot shots to outrageous contracts, and just as you said, the hotshots have no loyalty to the team. They'll bolt as soon as more money is waved in their faces from elsewhere. I love this subject & the way you crafted it into a poem ~ great stuff! :)

[Tom]

You've grasped my drift exactly London's Lily & thank you !