Your style here reminds me with my own at some of my poems, You used one brilliant image, and left the range of emotions to be felt through each verse, though there is only gloominess and ultimate despair, emptiness... but You started with a plea, though it will hurt to see it... but somehow this little flicker of hope still hanging on there, up at the start.
Well written, I could feel the state when Love dies, Thank You*
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
self delusion unfortunately Light
thank you for reviewing this one
:)
I feel the movement here of two hearts, noth positively charged, sadly repelling each other through time and space. Great metaphor and imagery-"your foot scrabbling remorsefully in the hearth of our love"-stellar, poignant verse. Kudos!
Your style here reminds me with my own at some of my poems, You used one brilliant image, and left the range of emotions to be felt through each verse, though there is only gloominess and ultimate despair, emptiness... but You started with a plea, though it will hurt to see it... but somehow this little flicker of hope still hanging on there, up at the start.
Well written, I could feel the state when Love dies, Thank You*
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
self delusion unfortunately Light
thank you for reviewing this one
:)
Yes love is a lot like boxing, if it doesn't work you go back to opposite corners, it just takes 12 rounds to find out and maybe after a knockout! Lovely wording Tony I like dark pulsars!
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Love can be a fight - the best relationships probably are (it indicates passion hasn't went out of i.. read moreLove can be a fight - the best relationships probably are (it indicates passion hasn't went out of it?)
Thank you Andrew
Without reason or rhyme is what this piece spoke to me about. So many unanswered questions, so many whys...
Alisa
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
I think you've hit it spot on Alisa. The breakup was sparked by paranoia on one side and ego on the .. read moreI think you've hit it spot on Alisa. The breakup was sparked by paranoia on one side and ego on the other both of which could probably be put down to immaturity.
Thanks for reviewing this one my dear friend
I hope all is well out Pacific-ways?
(hugs)
Thank you for asking.. it is wonderful to be alive...
Each day is a gift reminding us.. read moreThank you for asking.. it is wonderful to be alive...
Each day is a gift reminding us to be present...
Sending you smiles across the miles between us...
((((hugs)))
Alisa
7 Years Ago
Tis a gift indeed.
Love live laugh. Speaking of laugh - How did Darth Vader know what Luke S.. read moreTis a gift indeed.
Love live laugh. Speaking of laugh - How did Darth Vader know what Luke Skywalker bought him for his birthday? He felt his present(s).
This feels like the way a friend we both had has blocked me without any explanation - and after a relationship which seemed to be built on trust. The cold ashes of rejection are very hurtful.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
No one needs to provide an explanation Jibey. That's people for you. Rejection is a double-edged swo.. read moreNo one needs to provide an explanation Jibey. That's people for you. Rejection is a double-edged sword though. Thanks for calling and reviewing :)
Just writing to get it out
My avatar is an actual slice of an onion that I cut up and I kept and froze - it reminds me of the saying - If you don't laugh, you cry. more..