Missing Summer

Renga is Japanese collaborative poetry. Someone writes the first two lines in a way that would make it difficult for the next person to write the last three. The syllables per line are 5,7,5,7,7.

Missing Summer

 

Days get short and cold.
Red and yellow is abound.
Luster lost leaves fall.
Jacket clad, missing summer--
Leaves crunch beneath while walking.

(Stated by D.E. Ball, finished by Jen Miller)

--Written on September 19, 2008, along with members of my college's Japanese club, "The Society of the Red Sun."

Author's Note

I'm not the only writer of this poem. I'm giving credit to my friend, Jen Miller. Please comment, review, and tell me what you think.

Reviews

[Angi]

I have never heard of a Renga! Nicely done! Now I am off to Google. Ha! Angi~

[D.E. Ball]

I'm willing to say that most people are not familiar with renga. I think that it's a unique and interesting style of poetry, and it would be very cool if some members of the Writer's Cafe community would try their hands at it. Thanks for the comment, Angi!

[Marie]

A renga! I've never seen this before. It has an Oriental sound to it...very good...

[D.E. Ball]

In university, my Japanese club members studied and wrote renga (collaborative poetry). It's interesting to note that the first stanza of a renga, the pattern of 5, 7, 5 syllables, forms the basis for a haiku.

Thanks for your comment, Marie!

[Baby Ricochet]

Nice. I was there

[D.E. Ball]

Thanks for your comment, Ricochet!