Deal With The Devil's Daughter

i got bored at school? XD

Gently glancing
 across the way
The wind scatters hair
 throughout the day

His face looks so peaceful
 it's actually quite sweet
But to say that i love him
 would be totally weak

Closed blue eyes
 flowing blond hair
His chest rises and falls as he breathes
 not seeming to have a care

His uniform is untidy
 and his hair is a mess
But all in all
 he looks his best

There's blood staining his side
 it's easy to see
My work here is done
 it's time to take my leave

A smile graces my face
 as i look back at my art
The blood is a pretty red
 that's the best part

Gently glancing
 across the way
Wind scatters hair
 throughout the day

Take a step back
 and be sure not to cry
This is all in good health
 for everyone will die

My father stands
 across the plain
It's time to go home
 to a world of pain

Maybe one day
 we'll meet again
Write your name on this sheet
 Your blood is your pen

It's time for me to go
 I'll try not to cry
For the ones we love
 they always die

Gently glancing
 in a field of black
Wind scatters hair
 there's no turning back

Reviews

[Patrick Henry]

You are so pretty!! I LOVE the way you write. Those ending "puncts", I would just remove again, like I mention for your other poem "My Dear Angel" for the same reason. I never do this, but if you find my page and find "RachelReaper and ♥♥Amandaaa♥♥", you will find their poems to ALSO be enjoyable to you. I kinda read you in similar ways, and that's awesome... : ) I love how you write... it's gorgeous. But, I also love how you paint. Painting is tough. That's where you find it more interesting and easier to connect to with how you word things and character build!! It mkight even be effortless for you or by accident, but it's really nice to see, and you need to stick with it! Beautiful xAliceChan. xoxo -Mark

[xToxicTrick]

thanks again Mark i appreciate your compliments c: and please call me Allie or Alice since you seem to talk to me so much XD but i enjoy reading your reviews and ill be sure to take note of your recommendations :) xoxo- Allie